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    Graveside service

    I saw two people kneeling at graveside, tending the soil
    flowering at their sides,
    thet were facing each other
    and talking to themselves in whispers.

    Their bodies curled in the mist like yin and yang,
    steam was rising from the rain-damp meadow
    where cold stone monuments hold tribute to the dead,
    a solemn moment.

    A frame in time, stilled by the swiftness of the passing train,
    and my curious glance
    into oblivion.

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    Re: Graveside service

    Interesting topic. I love they way how you potrayed it in the last line. Good job.

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    Re: Graveside service

    Thank you elie26,
    I really saw that happen so I wrote a poem about it^_^

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    Re: Graveside service

    hmm the last stanza is good but i can't understand the second 1.. sheesh :/

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    Re: Graveside service

    @RayMe,
    you don't have to understand every poem you read, you know?

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    Re: Graveside service

    Lol.. really? but it would be a watse if i read it and not understand it..

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    Re: Graveside service

    yes, really,
    not everyone can understand every poem they read,
    I can relate to only a couple poems here even the ones I don't understand I'll still read them.

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    Re: Graveside service

    I love poetry and that is a really great poem!
    I never really write poems so much as read them.
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