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    Gravity...

    Of love

    Pushed inside a bland universe,
    Forfeiting a long journey in life.
    Rising above the rest,
    That seems no longer important.
    Clearing skies seem limitless now,
    Survival is no longer an option.

    Existing through action,
    Believing in yourself.
    Taking for granted what is beyond,
    Feeling what is in your reach.
    Realizing too late the error,
    As your actions do have consequences.

    Bonding of two similar beings,
    One in which is the half of the other.
    Further beyond the limitless possibilities,
    Nothing can no longer change what is now.
    Love has conquered all of who you are,
    There is noting more you can do.
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    Re: Gravity...

    Gravity Of Love??? i liked this poem, it tells something about the reality of love. i would like to see more detailed descriptions, on how love bonds to beings, and how love draws two persons into each other.

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    Re: Gravity...

    This poem was kind of "eh"... For some reason, I didnt see or feel anything to conect with.

    What I mean by format? I see the same old block paragraphs. change it around a little, get creative with the position of verses or stanzas.
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    Re: Gravity...

    Okay, about the "eh", I'd say maybe I'm missing inspiration and don't have enough emotions to portray at the moment in poetry. Till I get lightning electroshocked or something, I just might have lost my creativity till then....which is quite sad since I do like to write things. I guess I should stop writing it altogether till I find truly a new form of limitless inspiration......though I'd find it sad to do so.

    For deeping the feeling of love in what I wrote, well, it was only a small form of poetry and I agree that it's a subject to further dwell upon, I could do a second part to it, but not tonight, getting late and all. Tomorrow I just might try to conclude it and furthe develop the format if I have an hour on my hands to my clan leader Kasai :P
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    Re: Gravity...

    Quote Originally Posted by Soldat of life View Post
    Of love

    Pushed inside a bland universe,
    Forfeiting a long journey in life.
    Rising above the rest,
    That seems no longer important.
    Clearing skies seem limitless now,
    Survival is no longer an option.
    in the sense of love that is very true. With true love we tend to throw our self out there and maybe hope to make it

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