" The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting

viper11025 · May 03, 2006, 01:53 PM

The great battle:

Why must I fight?
For faith?
Who am I fighting for?
Myself?
All I know is that,
My friends are all dead,
My enemy's keep coming,
What should I do?
Keep fighting for the heavens?
Should I leave and let more people die here today?
My friends told me,
Fighting for the faith is the ultimate service you can give to HIM,
Why am I fighting for HIM?
Why is he not fighting with us?
I hate killing,
I cant stand it any longer.
I have to escape.
But how?
With the arrows flying through the air and the swords before me it's impossible.
Why must we do this?
Cant we all just get along?
My blood staind hands are now burning in fury,
My sword wishes for more.
I have only one thing to do now.
Fight.

Sarge · May 03, 2006, 02:01 PM

Cool nice poem

Im not kidding

viper11025 · May 03, 2006, 04:43 PM

''I am doing the best that I can"

Cya guys later.

*Blade X* · May 04, 2006, 09:59 AM

wow, from the fighting for God to giving the sword a sort mind, which craves for blood. This ssooo wicked, I look forward to reading more of ur stuff.

kedar · May 04, 2006, 10:10 AM

My eyes couldn't find any major nor minor errors, Bud!!! So, I do not have anything that I want to suggest for improvement. A brilliant piece of work. One thing I noticed is that you wrote poem filled with questions, and tried to make the reader see why those questions are hard to answer, which makes the poem quite unique compared the other ones that you wrote.

Keep it up!

*Mr. K* · May 04, 2006, 10:14 AM

^^ I like. Very nice. Nothing wrong, but you just knew what was coming next. No catch, but if that was you were going for. This is Great. ^_^

*hellknight* · May 04, 2006, 10:25 AM

very well done young viper, perhaps one day you might become a poet one day

viper11025 · May 04, 2006, 01:31 PM

One day?

I am the Poetic Warrior you only get to see once in a lifetime.
I cant stop writing it's my life,
My soul,
I cannot go on without it.
I tell you a poem then that's it,
Darkness controls you from that point on.
(Evil laugh)

BrightShadow_96 · May 05, 2006, 06:39 AM

it's very good, but i did see one thing that i kinda didn't like- it kind of seems like you just rushed some of the lines in.....Just my opinion. But it's really good.

viper11025 · May 05, 2006, 10:01 AM

It's a action type of poem.
I didnt have time to think it out

Im really wicked at this though.

*hellknight* · May 05, 2006, 10:04 AM

the love you have may vanish
into mystic air of cold
for you will never have love again

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viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	" The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting The great battle: Why must I fight? For faith? Who am I fighting for? Myself? All I know is that, My friends are all dead, My enemy's keep coming, What should I do? Keep fighting for the heavens? Should I leave and let more people die here today? My friends told me, Fighting for the faith is the ultimate service you can give to HIM, Why am I fighting for HIM? Why is he not fighting with us? I hate killing, I cant stand it any longer. I have to escape. But how? With the arrows flying through the air and the swords before me it's impossible. Why must we do this? Cant we all just get along? My blood staind hands are now burning in fury, My sword wishes for more. I have only one thing to do now. Fight.
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Sarge Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: The place you want to be Posts: 170 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,043	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting Cool nice poem Im not kidding __________________ Semper Fi Carry On
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viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting ''I am doing the best that I can" Cya guys later.
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Blade X AO's Demon Slayer Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Protecting my loved one. Posts: 1,606 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,446	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting wow, from the fighting for God to giving the sword a sort mind, which craves for blood. This ssooo wicked, I look forward to reading more of ur stuff. __________________ Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
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kedar Warrior Monk Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Monk Society Posts: 2,971 Thanks: 3 Thanked 7 Times in 7 Posts Credits: 17,255	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting My eyes couldn't find any major nor minor errors, Bud!!! So, I do not have anything that I want to suggest for improvement. A brilliant piece of work. One thing I noticed is that you wrote poem filled with questions, and tried to make the reader see why those questions are hard to answer, which makes the poem quite unique compared the other ones that you wrote. Keep it up! __________________
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Mr. K THUMBSUCKING ADDICTION Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Alaska Posts: 1,268 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,359	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting *^^ I like. Very nice. Nothing wrong, but you just knew what was coming next. No catch, but if that was you were going for. This is Great. ^_^* __________________ ≥°≤ [?] █▓▒░░▒▓█ [?] ≥°≤ ◕ ◡ ◕;;;;[?]
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hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: South dakota, Native American Posts: 1,448 Thanks: 2 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 15,699	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting very well done young viper, perhaps one day you might become a poet one day
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viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting One day? I am the Poetic Warrior you only get to see once in a lifetime. I cant stop writing it's my life, My soul, I cannot go on without it. I tell you a poem then that's it, Darkness controls you from that point on. (Evil laugh)
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BrightShadow_96 遁走より本当 Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Inside Reality & Serenity Posts: 571 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 3,375	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting it's very good, but i did see one thing that i kinda didn't like- it kind of seems like you just rushed some of the lines in.....Just my opinion. But it's really good. __________________
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viper11025 Under Surveilance Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ughh....Ask? Posts: 359 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 537	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting It's a action type of poem. I didnt have time to think it out Im really wicked at this though.
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hellknight Hell Enforcer Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: South dakota, Native American Posts: 1,448 Thanks: 2 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 15,699	Re: " The great battle " A Tribute to the fighting the love you have may vanish into mystic air of cold for you will never have love again
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