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    Greater Lights

    Greater Lights

    Memories
    Keeping me
    My steps have said
    You must go through every door
    Where you are led

    Silences hangs
    In my fear
    Daylight fades
    And I know you will be here
    Melting our ground

    In never ending shadows
    I'll follow you to greater lights
    Burn through me
    Around me
    I'll follow you to greater lights

    Words will fly
    Beyond us
    Waking now
    No longer numb to the sound
    Of every voice

    In never ending shadows
    I'll follow you to greater lights
    Burn through me
    Around me
    I'll follow you to greater lights
    In never ending shadows
    I'll follow you to greater heights
    Burn through me
    Around me
    I'll follow you to greater lights
    I'll follow you to greater heights.

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    Re: Greater Lights

    You seem to be able to create catche poems,
    I think this is one of your best ones yet..

    Quick qestion:

    You said
    Melting our ground
    What do you mean by that?
    I didnt understand this line,

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    Re: Greater Lights

    yeah that line left me to linger on it a little to try and understand it too....

    I wasn't sure it if was about this person trying to catch you off guard or was stopping in some way. But it then changed to this person guiding you along a better path.

    I still enjoyed reading it though i am looking forward to see you next piece
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    Re: Greater Lights

    Honestly, I just wanted to make people actually think about the poem itself. I left that there to break the fourth wall of poetry. If you want to know what I mean when I say the "fourth wall", read this link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fourth_wallYou know, to catch people off guard and make them concentrate on the rest of the poem. Like if I'd said at the end of the poem "The burning embers in my heart", people would start wondering what I was talking about, and reread the poem with greater attention.

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    Re: Greater Lights

    i did re-read some parts of the poem as i was reading it. it is one of the poems that really does make you think about you actually mean. even now i still don't really fully understand what you are talking about which leaves it to my imagination...i am not sure if it is suppose to but hay..i am weird person anyway.
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    Re: Greater Lights

    No, that's exactly the way it's supposed to be. That's really how all poetry is supposed to be. No matter what the author had in mind when he wrote it, the reader is supposed to come away with his own understanding of what the poem really meant.

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    Re: Greater Lights

    pretty clever, huh? XD... yeah, poets (and other writers) really do that... to create a bigger impact... to get more awe from the readers... it's something never really (or should I say, should not be) in the poem but it's somehow implied to create a deeper meaning and deeper thinking on the part of the person/s reading it... nice work... keep it up!

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    Re: Greater Lights

    Thank you. I appreciate your input. Maybe I'll do that more often...

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