solking

The greatest love story ever told
About a man, passionate and bold
And as this story unfolds
All of you will know
On that night that is pure cold
You have a person to have and to hold

On that faithful foggy night
Full of chaos and even fright
A man was born without a conscience
One who would be the downfall of all of us
Never to love never to live
Only to suffer and hate to give

The boy grew up and became a man
A horrendous person with one single plan
To the world he would bring an unruly fate
To this world he would open Hell's gates
And bring down those who despised him
All those who cursed him

Until that stormy and wondrous night
A lady came and to God's delight
She fell in love with the horrible man
And to all eternity she was dammed
For she loved a person who can never love
Even if she was sent from high above

I'm working on Part 2 at the moment.

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Kasai

Lol. I love the rhyme scheme in this poem. the flow was nice and the poem made me giggle.

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solking

Thank you. This was suppose to sound like on of those cheesy fairy tale kind of stories but in a poem form. Kind of a change in style.

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BlueFox1

I agree with Kasai, the poem is very amusing and the rhyme scheme is also excellent, keep up the good work solking!

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Raimann

Re: Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)
Lol. I love the rhyme scheme in this poem. the flow was nice and the poem made me giggle.

^^ *from Kasai*

wtf are u talkin bout
its a simple rhymin a-b structure that is most common


ok bakk to the idea....the love story made me think about past times
and i cant wait for number 2
can u message me when its done?

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solking

Well I guess I can do so. I'm trying to get the second part to continue with the first. I would have written it altogether but I get distracted and loose the flow. When I get it back is when I'll continue it. Its a problem I have with most of my work I loose the flow or the main idea before I reach a real ending for it.

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