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    Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)

    The greatest love story ever told
    About a man, passionate and bold
    And as this story unfolds
    All of you will know
    On that night that is pure cold
    You have a person to have and to hold

    On that faithful foggy night
    Full of chaos and even fright
    A man was born without a conscience
    One who would be the downfall of all of us
    Never to love never to live
    Only to suffer and hate to give

    The boy grew up and became a man
    A horrendous person with one single plan
    To the world he would bring an unruly fate
    To this world he would open Hell's gates
    And bring down those who despised him
    All those who cursed him

    Until that stormy and wondrous night
    A lady came and to God's delight
    She fell in love with the horrible man
    And to all eternity she was dammed
    For she loved a person who can never love
    Even if she was sent from high above

    I'm working on Part 2 at the moment.

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    Re: Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)

    Lol. I love the rhyme scheme in this poem. the flow was nice and the poem made me giggle.
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    Re: Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)

    Thank you. This was suppose to sound like on of those cheesy fairy tale kind of stories but in a poem form. Kind of a change in style.

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    Re: Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)

    I agree with Kasai, the poem is very amusing and the rhyme scheme is also excellent, keep up the good work solking!

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    Lol. I love the rhyme scheme in this poem. the flow was nice and the poem made me giggle.

    ^^ *from Kasai*

    wtf are u talkin bout
    its a simple rhymin a-b structure that is most common


    ok bakk to the idea....the love story made me think about past times
    and i cant wait for number 2
    can u message me when its done?

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    Re: Greatest Love Story Never Told (Part 1)

    Well I guess I can do so. I'm trying to get the second part to continue with the first. I would have written it altogether but I get distracted and loose the flow. When I get it back is when I'll continue it. Its a problem I have with most of my work I loose the flow or the main idea before I reach a real ending for it.

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