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    Grounded(poem)

    Here's another one of my poems. Tell me what you think.

    Grounded

    Can't you see what you’re doing to me?
    You've got me grounded
    You've clipped my wings

    I'm not the me I used to be
    You can't keep me bound in chains
    I need to be free

    Stop giving me your guilt trips
    Please don't try to make me cry
    Leave me alone your suffocating me
    You can't keep me here
    In this place I'll die

    Like a caged bird needs to fly
    I need to leave
    A sprit can't be held down
    With just a roof overhead

    I can't find it here
    What I'm searching for
    The missing piece of my heart
    It's out there somewhere
    So just please let me go

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    Cool, i like it alot! Keep up the good work!

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    Sounds like someone's stuck inside a cage and needs to get out...*gives wings to whitemage* FLY!

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    Quote Originally Posted by pigtaru
    Sounds like someone's stuck inside a cage and needs to get out...*gives wings to whitemage* FLY!
    Lol I'm so clumsy. If I had wings I'd kill myself.

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    I have never been grounded, so I do not know how it all feels like, but your poem brought to light of how the experience would be. Neatly written, White Mage. The poem went on smoothly from start to finish, so there was a flow to it, which I liked very much. You have improved quite a lot from your last ones, which were amazing as well. But hey, I see a spell error. Consider:

    A sprit can't be held down.

    It should have been spirit, not sprit. One less cookie for White Mage. ^_^ I am just playing with you! Keep it up, White Mage! And, please share more.

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    Quote Originally Posted by kedar
    I have never been grounded, so I do not know how it all feels like, but your poem brought to light of how the experience would be. Neatly written, White Mage. The poem went on smoothly from start to finish, so there was a flow to it, which I liked very much. You have improved quite a lot from your last ones, which were amazing as well. But hey, I see a spell error. Consider:

    A sprit can't be held down.

    It should have been spirit, not sprit. One less cookie for White Mage. ^_^ I am just playing with you! Keep it up, White Mage! And, please share more.
    Lol oh well I spelled something else wrong. I'm glad you think I'm getting better. I haven't been really writting poems long to tell you the truth. I used to write them every once in a while, but recently I've been writting them every chance I get. (mostly because I'm bored in chemistry)

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    Quote Originally Posted by White_Mage88
    Lol oh well I spelled something else wrong. I'm glad you think I'm getting better. I haven't been really writting poems long to tell you the truth. I used to write them every once in a while, but recently I've been writting them every chance I get. (mostly because I'm bored in chemistry)
    That's awesome, White Mage! It's great to see that you utilize your spare to write poetry. Always keep the mind occupied. ^^ Anyway! Yes, your poetic skills have enhanced, so continue writing each day, then one day, you will be a great poet. I see full potential in you, so please work with it to the extreme. ^_^

    P.S. Hey, hey, hey! It is writing, not writting. Just playing. Sorry about that. ^_^

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    Re: Grounded(poem)

    I thought that was pretty interesting keep it up.

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