Thread: The Guardian

WOW. that is very beautiful!!! even though kind of creepy but good. i think there are a few spelling mistakes and some words you might need to change to make some places make sense. but anyways that was very good. i love it!!! Good job. keep it up!!=)

I'm not a very good spell, I try my best though. It's justsome thing I never picked up on.

Originally Posted by shoru

The Guardian

As night rolls in
A man is perched upon the highest peak of the mountain
He is dressed in a white cloak.

Nightfall sets
Upon the sleepy town unaware of the secrets that lurk with in the shadows
Of there oh so humble town

This man is the guardian of them
He hinds their secrets from the world
Their sickness

Their grief
He is the one that purifies their tainted deeds
Great power he holds to protect them
But not even him can protect the from what they have released

A red moon rise in the distance
He cries out as the
Creatures they have released

Rise to terrify the earth with a malevolent wrath.
The strongest of the beast opposes the man.
A smile appears on his face

“Leave foul creature!”
He commands
The beast snaps at him with infective venom
The venom penetrates his skin

“For those that walk in darkness we know nothing but lies”
“For those that walk in light will know nothing but victory”
He falls to the ground.

Taken down by the very people he protected
By those he loved
By the most unforgivable sin

Hatred
Kills the most humans
Because of are evil ways.

Very good. The poem is quite detailed, and has emotion like hatred and grief. I like it.