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    The Guardian

    The Guardian

    As night rolls in
    A man is perched upon the highest peak of the mountain
    He is dressed in a white cloak.

    Nightfall sets
    Upon the sleepy town unaware of the secrets that lurk with in the shadows
    Of there oh so humble town

    This man is the guardian of them
    He hinds their secrets from the world
    Their sickness

    Their grief
    He is the one that purifies their tainted deeds
    Great power he holds to protect them
    But not even him can protect the from what they have released

    A red moon rise in the distance
    He cries out as the
    Creatures they have released

    Rise to terrify the earth with a malevolent wrath.
    The strongest of the beast opposes the man.
    A smile appears on his face

    “Leave foul creature!”
    He commands
    The beast snaps at him with infective venom
    The venom penetrates his skin

    “For those that walk in darkness we know nothing but lies”
    “For those that walk in light will know nothing but victory”
    He falls to the ground.

    Taken down by the very people he protected
    By those he loved
    By the most unforgivable sin

    Hatred
    Kills the most humans
    Because of are evil ways.

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    Re: The Guardian

    WOW. that is very beautiful!!! even though kind of creepy but good. i think there are a few spelling mistakes and some words you might need to change to make some places make sense. but anyways that was very good. i love it!!! Good job. keep it up!!=)

    IF YOU LISTEN CLOSELY, YOU CAN HEAR MY HEART BEATING FOR YOU.
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    I'm not a very good spell, I try my best though. It's justsome thing I never picked up on.

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    Re: The Guardian

    Quote Originally Posted by shoru View Post
    The Guardian

    As night rolls in
    A man is perched upon the highest peak of the mountain
    He is dressed in a white cloak.

    Nightfall sets
    Upon the sleepy town unaware of the secrets that lurk with in the shadows
    Of there oh so humble town

    This man is the guardian of them
    He hinds their secrets from the world
    Their sickness

    Their grief
    He is the one that purifies their tainted deeds
    Great power he holds to protect them
    But not even him can protect the from what they have released

    A red moon rise in the distance
    He cries out as the
    Creatures they have released

    Rise to terrify the earth with a malevolent wrath.
    The strongest of the beast opposes the man.
    A smile appears on his face

    “Leave foul creature!”
    He commands
    The beast snaps at him with infective venom
    The venom penetrates his skin

    “For those that walk in darkness we know nothing but lies”
    “For those that walk in light will know nothing but victory”
    He falls to the ground.

    Taken down by the very people he protected
    By those he loved
    By the most unforgivable sin

    Hatred
    Kills the most humans
    Because of are evil ways.
    Very good. The poem is quite detailed, and has emotion like hatred and grief. I like it.

    DollCorpse

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