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    Guilt

    This shadow...
    This shadow...
    This shadow that never leaves
    Never to let me on my own
    Never to let me be

    This heart...
    This heart...
    This heart burning within
    Now seems to be as cold as ice
    From all my thoughts and sin

    This mind...
    This mind...
    This mind that used to be
    A place where I could save my self
    From the evil within me

    Maybe...
    Maybe...
    Maybe things aren't bleak
    I can still do good in the world
    And stop my sinful streak

    But...

    This shadow...
    This shadow...
    This shadow that never leaves
    Never to let me on my own
    Never to let me be


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Guilt

    Quote Originally Posted by ILikeApples5520 View Post

    This shadow...
    This shadow...
    This shadow that never leaves
    Never to let me on my own
    Never to let me be
    Wow, this is very scary. It sent a shiver up my spine. I suppose this is why I am careful not to do thing I will feel guilty for later.

    Oddly enough, even without guilt... I still do thing I regret... But thats because I hurt myself more than anyone else.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Guilt

    EDIT///

    Accidentally reposted my poem. Whoops

    O yeah, and thanks for the comment, Peach

    It kinda gave me a chill just writing it.


    Thanks to _gwenibe_ for this awesome sig!

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    Re: Guilt

    interesting poem! I love scary stuff so yeah I love this poem! Good job hope to see more!^^



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    Re: Guilt

    Nice... I like it... even though at first those first two lines at the start of every stranza seemed hard to put in rythme.... but it's just because I hadn't read anything like that before... and they're in place- they show how confused you are...

    I love how you've writen it- this poem really shows you know how to put your feelings in words... indeed very cool...

    Great work and I'll be looking forward for more!!!

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    Re: Guilt

    I really like this. I can sympathize entierly with the sentiment of this poem. I live with plenty of guilt myself. Hopefully it will all pass. I think this was beautifully written.

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