seems good enough but i havent played gg at all so i cant relate to the characters you wrote about
the battle is pretty good but i think it could be alittle more detailed to add depth. maybe add colors, or maybe just add to the length of the battle, they took one swat at eachother. not much of a competition of testosterone you expect from two hotheaded guys.
maaybe add more to the scenery. you have it raining and just outside a church. that is good. but is it windy? thundering?, since its raining maybe make mention how the rain sizzled as it came in contact with the flames or something like that
just suggestions so take it with a grain of salt so to speak.