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    *Hanging Offense*

    Since this is my first poem, please go easy on me!

    I let you see my childish fears
    The streaming of my non-stop tears
    Please listen to my silent plea;
    I still need you so despratly.

    How could you just throw me away?
    There are things I still need to say;
    Your open secret made me tense
    Should be made a hanging offense.

    Your road is always bending,
    Not like my happy ending
    Why won't you let me stay?
    'Cuz i'm not gonna go away.

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    It's pretty good 9/10 ...

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    It's beautiful . . . yet sad at the same time. Could sound like a personal experience

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    That was really nice I hope you to post more poems

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    nice poem here. Sorri, not really good at giving constructive comments. Anyway keep it up.

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    Please write me some poems so I can pose as a good poet, haha

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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    haha, don't see many 'rhyming poems' on AO so I like it. lol. A little harsh though... but thats life, what r u gonna do? lol.
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    Re: *Hanging Offense*

    Being your very first poem, you did a great job, Kerry. Short and simple, just the way I like. You should continue to write more poetry, and take time to share with us. I bet, if you continue writing like this, one day, you will become very proficient in writing poetry. Anyway! Keep up the great work, and keep 'em coming. ^_^

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