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Reply With Quotekool poem hiei9957, although it is abit too short. Keep it up.
thats how they want you to think it will be
but its not
not at all in reality
the deaths,the tears,the fears and the falls
thought it all we still go on
the broken hearts
the cheating friends
so much pain that never ends
the fake smiles that seem to make everything ok
but not for me because i know the pain wont go away
bright and cherry but oh so weary,
because inside my heart is breaking in two.
Tanks zyta
kool poem hiei9957, although it is abit too short. Keep it up.
Nice its better then most it heard
but whats know mankind is born in pain and we die in pain.
Though the fact the poem is short,I enjoyed the emotions that are in this poem.Like all poems,it connects to the reader and this one does that and also I think...appeals to the soft side of people.That's nice.
i didnt know poems had to be long. ill try to write a nother one.
Tanks zyta
for a short poem this is really good, it has a good flow with it and nice performence, keep it up
Poems don't have to be long. Although it was good and had alot of emotion you could have elaborated more and go into more detail. It wouldn't hurt to extend it more. Overall I liked it.
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