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    hate and fire

    burn the hearts of who you desire
    bringing it all down to ashes
    set it all on fire
    until everything crashes

    all the hate burn in your eyes
    use the anger in your veins
    and tell them not to ever give lies
    put your anger in control like reins

    light it all up with a torch
    just make everthing go blaze
    leave all ashes and scorce
    let it go high like a wild raze


    though of it in class, so please comment
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    Re: hate and fire

    This poem has an angry feel to it. The only thing I really see wrong with it is a couple of spelling mistakes but other than that nice dark poem! Hope to see more of your work!

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    Re: hate and fire

    It adds to me when I'm at rage...
    This feeling I just don't know how to say...
    Everytime I came through this page,
    I just can't throw my anger far away...

    Great job... Keep it up...

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    Re: hate and fire

    i liked the way you put the anger in it. Certainly has a great feel to it, however there are one or two spelling mistakes. Besdies that, its an interesting and emotive poem. ^ ^
    Keep it up.


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    Re: hate and fire

    wow Wolfy i liked it alot, the emotions were expressed really well.
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