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    Hatred

    I wrote this about two years ago, when I was in a really, really bad mood. Today, in the dark mood I am in, I'm posting it for the first time. Please... I have very low self-esteemed, so try to be as subtle as you can when if you critize it...

    Fire tears through the flesh
    The hounds of hell nip at your feet
    A satanic laughter rings out,
    Causing an increase in heat

    Flames course through your body,
    Causing a bone chilling scream
    Wishing for it to stop, it doesn't
    An everlasting dream

    Demons jeer and chant throughout
    Sweat mingles with their putrid smell
    Pointing and cheering all the day
    Within the confines of hell

    Tears pour down your face
    Sizzling on the ground below
    Eyes wide with glee,
    As hatred takes its toll

    Trapped forever in your mind,
    The hatred shall remain,
    Forever blossoming,
    A force unable to be tamed.

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    Re: Hatred

    wow that is a great poem alittle on the scary side but still good

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    Re: Hatred

    Wow I really liked this poem.. the title caught my eye.. this is really deep and I say that you should post more!! I really liked this work!
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    Re: Hatred

    Wow! This was really good Wolf! I liked it alot.I could so feel the hate and saddness in this poem.Awesome job and I can't wait 2 read more.
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    Re: Hatred

    woot~ i like this poem its great! its a dark kind and i love it! the pain, sadness and hatred combined.

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    Re: Hatred

    i like the poem alot it was real dark

    Trapped forever in your mind,
    The hatred shall remain,
    Forever blossoming,
    A force unable to be tamed.
    this was my fave


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    Re: Hatred

    nice poem.... a little on the creepy side though... ^^"
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    Re: Hatred

    To think . . . all this hatred (obviously), pain, and anger from a Geometry class . . . . You rock my socks. Post your poem about The End.

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