Hatred

Wolf_of_the_North · Nov 04, 2006, 04:26 PM

I wrote this about two years ago, when I was in a really, really bad mood. Today, in the dark mood I am in, I'm posting it for the first time. Please... I have very low self-esteemed, so try to be as subtle as you can when if you critize it...

Fire tears through the flesh
The hounds of hell nip at your feet
A satanic laughter rings out,
Causing an increase in heat

Flames course through your body,
Causing a bone chilling scream
Wishing for it to stop, it doesn't
An everlasting dream

Demons jeer and chant throughout
Sweat mingles with their putrid smell
Pointing and cheering all the day
Within the confines of hell

Tears pour down your face
Sizzling on the ground below
Eyes wide with glee,
As hatred takes its toll

Trapped forever in your mind,
The hatred shall remain,
Forever blossoming,
A force unable to be tamed.

DEMON SPAWN · Nov 04, 2006, 05:26 PM

wow that is a great poem alittle on the scary side but still good

rksamurai · Nov 06, 2006, 02:01 PM

Wow I really liked this poem.. the title caught my eye.. this is really deep and I say that you should post more!! I really liked this work!

Shinigami's_Angel · Nov 07, 2006, 04:02 PM

Wow! This was really good Wolf! I liked it alot.I could so feel the hate and saddness in this poem.Awesome job and I can't wait 2 read more.

Twisted Fate · Nov 08, 2006, 03:25 AM

woot~ i like this poem its great! its a dark kind and i love it! the pain, sadness and hatred combined.

Shippo101 · Nov 08, 2006, 06:26 AM

i like the poem alot it was real dark

Quote:

Trapped forever in your mind,
The hatred shall remain,
Forever blossoming,
A force unable to be tamed.

this was my fave

JADERABBIT~ EVERYONE TAKE THIS AS A EXAMPLE OF HOW NOT TO POST! NEXT TIME shippo ITS BAN FROM POEMS SECTION.

Jounin_Uzumaki · Nov 08, 2006, 08:05 AM

nice poem.... a little on the creepy side though... ^^"

*divine_punishment* · Nov 08, 2006, 08:15 AM

To think . . . all this hatred (obviously), pain, and anger from a Geometry class . . . . You rock my socks. Post your poem about The End.

For3v3r_Lost · Nov 08, 2006, 05:02 PM

Wow, I don't know what to say about this poem but it's absolutely amazing! I love it! The title made me want to read this poem so I went ahead and read. It's good that you write poems based on how you feel. I do that a lot with most of my poems and songs. XD Keep up the good work!

Wolf_of_the_North · Dec 10, 2006, 05:56 PM

Heh...thank you!!!! That makes me feel all fuzzy inside!!! Yay fuzziness!!!

3x3ninja · Dec 10, 2006, 06:52 PM

That was good, yea a lil scary but really good, i want to hear more from you

Nov 04, 2006, 04:26 PM	#1 (permalink)
Wolf_of_the_North Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Just a hopscotch away from Never Never Land... Posts: 112 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 987	Hatred I wrote this about two years ago, when I was in a really, really bad mood. Today, in the dark mood I am in, I'm posting it for the first time. Please... I have very low self-esteemed, so try to be as subtle as you can when if you critize it... Fire tears through the flesh The hounds of hell nip at your feet A satanic laughter rings out, Causing an increase in heat Flames course through your body, Causing a bone chilling scream Wishing for it to stop, it doesn't An everlasting dream Demons jeer and chant throughout Sweat mingles with their putrid smell Pointing and cheering all the day Within the confines of hell Tears pour down your face Sizzling on the ground below Eyes wide with glee, As hatred takes its toll Trapped forever in your mind, The hatred shall remain, Forever blossoming, A force unable to be tamed. __________________ DEMON SPAWN IS AWESOME!!!!! XP
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DEMON SPAWN Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: all over the world Posts: 330 Thanks: 6 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 2,210	Re: Hatred wow that is a great poem alittle on the scary side but still good __________________ Fable 2 Who will you become?
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rksamurai Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Within the arms of the one I love. Posts: 401 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 1,595	Re: Hatred Wow I really liked this poem.. the title caught my eye.. this is really deep and I say that you should post more!! I really liked this work! __________________ Thank you Lasura! My lover speaks; and he says, 'Arise my beloved my beautiful one and come!' -Song of Songs 2:10
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Shinigami's_Angel In The Arms Of My Lover Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: In Axel's Closet!! watch's him sleep XD Posts: 687 Thanks: 40 Thanked 7 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 3,351	Re: Hatred Wow! This was really good Wolf! I liked it alot.I could so feel the hate and saddness in this poem.Awesome job and I can't wait 2 read more. __________________ Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^
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Twisted Fate Newbie Join Date: Nov 2006 Posts: 47 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 10	Re: Hatred woot~ i like this poem its great! its a dark kind and i love it! the pain, sadness and hatred combined.
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Jounin_Uzumaki Newbie Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Longmont, CO Posts: 43 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 650	Re: Hatred nice poem.... a little on the creepy side though... ^^" __________________ I have an RP site... want to join? Then PM me and we'll talk... P.S. - Don't hurt me...
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divine_punishment Shining Star Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: Good question . . . where am I? Posts: 1,271 Thanks: 22 Thanked 27 Times in 22 Posts Credits: 59,274	Re: Hatred To think . . . all this hatred (obviously), pain, and anger from a Geometry class . . . . You rock my socks. Post your poem about The End. __________________ Bite Me!
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For3v3r_Lost Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jun 2006 Location: My own little world Posts: 249 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 410	Re: Hatred Wow, I don't know what to say about this poem but it's absolutely amazing! I love it! The title made me want to read this poem so I went ahead and read. It's good that you write poems based on how you feel. I do that a lot with most of my poems and songs. XD Keep up the good work! __________________ .:\|Myspace Profile\|.:.\|My Forum\|.:.\|My AO Gallery\|.:.\|My December\|:. "I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words." Last edited by For3v3r_Lost; Nov 08, 2006 at 05:12 PM.
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Wolf_of_the_North Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Just a hopscotch away from Never Never Land... Posts: 112 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 987	Re: Hatred Heh...thank you!!!! That makes me feel all fuzzy inside!!! Yay fuzziness!!! __________________ DEMON SPAWN IS AWESOME!!!!! XP
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3x3ninja Newbie Join Date: Nov 2006 Location: (^_^) Behind you! Posts: 23 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: 160	Re: Hatred That was good, yea a lil scary but really good, i want to hear more from you __________________ BEHIND YOU!
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