Thread: hatred valid reason...

I get your point, but the way you're trying to convey it... Not so good. Not much flow to this. Lots of emotion, but it's "hazy". I guess the blatantness just won't work out without a stable structure.

"But even in a burning, fallen or even to do with a bomb..."? I think the grammar might be a bit off, or if it's my English skills, terribly sorry... It just sounds awkward to me... And, concerning "It might be there duty to do so but to go agents that ones wishes ..." Some nitpicking: You spelled "against" wrong, there should be an apostrophe in "one's". And what I think the biggest crack with that line is... Again, the lack of structure and flow. "Is that really there duty to disown peoples trust?..." Also really struck me as awkward, I'm guessing it's the "that". Oh, and there's an apostrophe missing.

Be more careful with the ending. That's the last thing anyone will see, so that, along with the first line, will make the biggest impression... Which reminds me, the first line... It's missing a certain element... An artistic element? Expressing your thoughts differently might help.

I agree. There is no real flow, and the grammar/punctuation/spelling are all, well... rather awful. And the poem overall doesn't do much to explain the theme, why you hate soldiers.

"I'm sorry but i have my reasons onto why i just can't share then with you"... I promise, we're all dying to know. See, saying "I despise you and I can't tell you why" is kind of rude.

And, I cannot agree or disagree with you because I'm not sure exactly what you're trying to say, as your poem is nearly indecipherable.

I'm sorry. I mean no offense, I want no issue with you. I'm just very confused by your post, is all.



*Avoids discussion over whether there ever IS a valid reason for hate*