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    Haunting Me

    I just finished a new poem. Looks like I'm back in a poem writting mood for a while. Tell me what you think.

    Haunting Me-

    In the back of my mind
    I was waiting for the rain to fall
    And drown my heart
    But still I wasn’t ready
    For the flood that broke down the walls

    I always knew I wasn’t enough
    I’m not right for anyone
    Never will be what you need
    Never will be what you want

    But that doesn’t mean
    I should be treated this way
    No one else gets left
    Crying in a pool of blood
    Reflecting broken memories

    Do you even remember my name?
    My soul still calls to you
    Calls your name from the depths of this dark hell
    But you don’t hear me
    You’ve closed yourself to my words

    I feel like I’ve lost it all
    Will I ever move on?
    Will your memory ever be distant and far away?
    Or will you haunt me for all eternity?

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    Re: Haunting Me

    This poem makes me sad. It is very poignant to the senses in my mind and I really like it. Keep it up White Mage!

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    Re: Haunting Me

    Well that was interesting. I know how you feel though. Very nice with the feelings and all.
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    Re: Haunting Me

    i know how you feel and i can kind of relate to you wrote.

    It really is a great poem
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    Re: Haunting Me

    it is a great poem i like the begging the 1st verse more characteristic, keep it up

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    Re: Haunting Me

    Nice job, I feel the emotion in every line of this poem and the title suits it very well! Nice one!

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    Re: Haunting Me

    it's sad.it reminds me of my ex.but, it is great keep on writing it start to make me write!
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