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    Have I lost my touch?

    This could be a part of a story or a play I COULD write, where a poet talks to himself of how it has become after him comming back to his town after a month of absence... Oooor... these could be my personal thoughts... Just hit me as if like in a dream...

    Have I lost my touch
    Even in something I love so much?
    Have my poems gone bad?
    Or it just because they’re so sad?

    Or did it took only a month
    For friends to forget of this trunk;
    A month for the trace I’ve craved so hard to leave behind
    To be swept away like junk of some kind?

    Oh the cruel world of today
    Where only the closest friends are sure to stay,
    Where the lack of time spend together
    May spoil a friendship… forever..

    Oh, what does my passion mean
    When it just makes more space to clean?
    What use of making friends,
    If it’s just a case of trends?

    I should leave… I should
    But giving up is not something I would…
    I guess it’s time to crawl on these streets
    I guess Luck is something not everyone meets…
    Last edited by Lasura; Oct 12, 2007 at 04:22 AM.

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    Re: Have I lost my touch?

    aww.. u haven't ^^ u are still as good as u were b4 Keep up the good work... ^^

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    Re: Have I lost my touch?

    this is nice. But the tink is that to find a real friend is reallky hard and friends who understand you there's no many.
    Do not dwell in the past... do not wonder about the future... just life the present to the fullness...

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    Re: Have I lost my touch?

    I have felt EXACTLY what this poem depicts. Excactly... I swear it. And you wrote it so wonderfully!

    "Oh, what does my passion mean
    When it just makes more space to clean?
    What use of making friends,
    If it’s just a case of trends?"

    Thats is so stunning.

    Oh and I like how you have "mixed flava' groupie" on the sig. Kinda makes me feel like trend setter Did you know mine used "Lasura's Groupie" before it was "mixed flava" or "Nariko"? It really did! Back when we joked of starting a Lasura fanclub.
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    Re: Have I lost my touch?

    Lasura fan club? @.@ i'll be the leader~!!

    xD

    Yup... i agree with Jairo and Peachy.. This proves u haven't lost ur touch dear

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    Re: Have I lost my touch?

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    Have I lost my touch
    Even in something I love so much?
    Have my poems gone bad?
    Or it just because they’re so sad?
    I should leave… I should
    But giving up is not something I would…
    I guess it’s time to crawl on these streets
    I guess Luck is something not everyone meets…
    Such a sad poem. Sometimes you pushed the rhyme scheme a bit much, but it was still good. I see it as a sort of rhyming soliloquy, a poet with writer's block sitting in the rain and talking to himself. I liked it.

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