Thread: He needs...

Dog Dog That's Hot Dog Hot Like Fira Dog You Killing Blizzaga Dog.

Yeah he needs to be loved by someone[especially they love each other to make their relationship FOREVER]...>>
But i loved it and was great rhyming and the same as the emotions you put in....>>>
Keep it UP!^_^

I really enjoyed this. The rhyme scheme seemed slightly over done to me. HOWEVER it didn't detract from the meaning in the words (Like I feel it does to my works. which is why I don't often rhyme on purpose.) I'd really like to talk to you about this but it's not much of an infront of boyfriend conversation and your never online anymore.

I love how it leaves the reader wondering what it is he feels he needs. (some readers may do more than wonder)

I can relate so much to the emotions in this. Especially the feeling of being capable of so much more than what life's current situation has dealt.

You should do a series of these. I will continue to (more than) wonder if "he" ever found what he needed. But I guess that mystery is what makes this so worth the read.

Originally Posted by ChaosTempest

Dog Dog That's Hot Dog Hot Like Fira Dog You Killing Blizzaga Dog.

Thank you, Randy Jackson!! LOL!!

Originally Posted by bratling

I really enjoyed this. The rhyme scheme seemed slightly over done to me. HOWEVER it didn't detract from the meaning in the words (Like I feel it does to my works. which is why I don't often rhyme on purpose.) I'd really like to talk to you about this but it's not much of an infront of boyfriend conversation and your never online anymore.

My internet is down until around the end of this upcoming week, unfortunately (I'm at Caribou right now). However, we will talk.

Originally Posted by Peach_follows

I love how it leaves the reader wondering what it is he feels he needs. (some readers may do more than wonder)

I can relate so much to the emotions in this. Especially the feeling of being capable of so much more than what life's current situation has dealt.

You should do a series of these. I will continue to (more than) wonder if "he" ever found what he needed. But I guess that mystery is what makes this so worth the read.

Ha! A series?! It took me an hour to write this, LOL. I'm so rusty. However, it's a pretty good idea. I'll consider it. ^_^

Thanks for reading, everyone!

Originally Posted by atomik_sprout

He needs no surety.
A man who works in obscurity,
his clients have no maturity.
Plus there's no job security.

He doesn't want insurance
when he has no assurance.
Sure as hell has no affluence,
or any feeling of signifigance.

He doesn't want this position.
He has way too much ambition.
His entire life's mission
is to get some recognition.

Maybe he would like to include
someone who's love can be accrued.
But that option he'll exclude
until he is finally in the mood.

'Til then he lives in solitary.
With other people he is wary.
Public opinion to the contrary,
being hurt again is scary.

But still he feels he needs...

:OOOOOOO amazing bot. xD this really rocked my sockssss.