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Reply With Quote"Criticisem" is actually spelled "criticism." Did you do that just to be funny. Or is that another one of your archaic linguistic exercises.Originally Posted by Dragons2801
Thine sole now wanders
Amongst the darkened realm of thine mind
Once scared
Now cracked
Thine dearest has left
Never to return to thine arms
Never will thine eyes see thou gentle face.
Thine soul now burdened
All hope fails
Thine heart now shatters
Thine soul now crumbles
Thine mind now fails
Leaving nothing but an empty husk behind
No longer feels emotion
No longer feels pain
Thine soul now gone
this is a poem that i just wrote and i would like you all to give a little bit of your constructive criticisem.
Last edited by Dragons2801; Apr 24, 2010 at 01:23 PM.
within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.
"Criticisem" is actually spelled "criticism." Did you do that just to be funny. Or is that another one of your archaic linguistic exercises.
I think it is very good. I also like the classical style you have adopted I have always found it difficult to write in that style.
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Dragons2801 (Apr 22, 2010)
lol is someone geting angry? but i was a little drousie
within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.
Did you intentionally miss spell "getting" and "drowsy"?lol is someone geting angry? but i was a little drousie
lol im messin with you man, you are fun to bug, you are very inteligent and you cannot stand people using illproper grammer and mispelling words
within the darkened realm of the mind, is endless shadows, wrenching pain, warming love, and burning desires.
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