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    From Heaven to Hell

    Sorry if I misspelled anything but over all I like this poem.

    From Heaven to Hell

    From Heavento Hell thats my life
    it happens to often
    I can't bear it.

    I'll be in the clouds
    only feeling happiness
    not careing what could happen next.
    Then it happens


    From Heaven to Hell
    thats my life
    it happens so often
    I can't bear it.

    Now I'm in the pits of hell
    I only fell sorrow.
    Scared of what might happen next
    Then it happens


    From Heaven to Hell
    thats my life
    it happens so often
    I can't bear it

    I'm back in the clouds
    I only happiness
    not careing what could happen next
    Then it starts all over

    From Heaven to Hell
    thats my life

    it happens so often
    I can't bear it.


    Well thats it I know it may not seem as much but I hope you all like it in some way.
    Last edited by kedar; Sep 16, 2006 at 12:23 PM.

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    Re: From Heaven to Hell

    ~!!! I can see the transitional flow that you planted into this poem, by detailing the characteristic state in heaven and in hell, but overall, it's pretty simple. However, it contains a good meaning. Next time, try to elaborate a little more. ^_^ All in all, it's a neat little poem. Keep the good work.

    -> Corrected the title.
    Last edited by kedar; Sep 16, 2006 at 12:23 PM.

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    Re: From Heanen to Hell

    its good i like it, the way it keeps changing etc its a realy unique idea and i think youve made it work well, good job

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