very beautiful I love great descriptions like these they give me the real feeling of being in this poem
I did another descriptive poem, hopefully it doesn't sound like a repeat version of my old "Willows in the wind" poem. ^^" Enjoy.
Blue fluffs floating above
Greens that cover the land
In the middle of peace and serenity
Momentarily stunned by its beauty
A lake living within heaven’s walls
Creating a massive world of blue
Roses growing from beneath my feet
Listening to the soft rush of the water flow
Civilization appears miles at this moment
Unknowingly I close my eyes and lay back
Giving myself whole to this sanctum
Drifting away in its peaceful presence
Mountain that stood unwavering
With mists clouding the peak
Giving a false sense of mystery
While tiny specks of light pear through
Caught in a real life trance
With senses tingling all around
Petals of roses fall to the ground
In a trice, it was heaven’s scent
Looks like somebody has been getting better during her leave. Awesome work, nice description... and reminds me of your sig ... again!
i always love poems that describe scenery in some way, so i really like this poem.
my favorite part would have to be the second stanza, especially the first line "A lake living within heaven’s walls", makes me see a glistening lake, really like the expression.
nice poem, i better get around to read the others that i have missed.
I really like this work, it's wonderfuly beautiful... It was nice to read it, you created this place in my mind and I wished I could really be there... Wonderful!!!
My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
^^" Thanks ya'll. I love describing places in my head It gives me some sort of peace thing going on when I write stuff like this. I got the title randomly,.. cuz I thought of Heaven SENT... something that popped into my mind and decided to play with the word and change it to SCENT =p I'll work harder to improve >_< Thanks again.
hmm, sounds like a VS Perfume there.. hehehe..
anyway, nice poem there..
you have brought out the beauty of anture itself..
cool, keep it up! see yah...
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