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    Heaven Scent

    I did another descriptive poem, hopefully it doesn't sound like a repeat version of my old "Willows in the wind" poem. ^^" Enjoy.

    Heaven Scent

    Blue fluffs floating above
    Greens that cover the land
    In the middle of peace and serenity
    Momentarily stunned by its beauty

    A lake living within heaven’s walls
    Creating a massive world of blue
    Roses growing from beneath my feet
    Listening to the soft rush of the water flow

    Civilization appears miles at this moment
    Unknowingly I close my eyes and lay back
    Giving myself whole to this sanctum
    Drifting away in its peaceful presence

    Mountain that stood unwavering
    With mists clouding the peak
    Giving a false sense of mystery
    While tiny specks of light pear through

    Caught in a real life trance
    With senses tingling all around
    Petals of roses fall to the ground
    In a trice, it was heaven’s scent

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    Re: Heaven Scent

    very beautiful I love great descriptions like these they give me the real feeling of being in this poem


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    Re: Heaven Scent

    Looks like somebody has been getting better during her leave. Awesome work, nice description... and reminds me of your sig ... again!

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    Re: Heaven Scent

    i always love poems that describe scenery in some way, so i really like this poem.

    my favorite part would have to be the second stanza, especially the first line "A lake living within heaven’s walls", makes me see a glistening lake, really like the expression.

    nice poem, i better get around to read the others that i have missed.

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    Re: Heaven Scent

    I really like this work, it's wonderfuly beautiful... It was nice to read it, you created this place in my mind and I wished I could really be there... Wonderful!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: Heaven Scent

    ^^" Thanks ya'll. I love describing places in my head It gives me some sort of peace thing going on when I write stuff like this. I got the title randomly,.. cuz I thought of Heaven SENT... something that popped into my mind and decided to play with the word and change it to SCENT =p I'll work harder to improve >_< Thanks again.

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    Re: Heaven Scent

    Heaven scent..
    hmm, sounds like a VS Perfume there.. hehehe..

    anyway, nice poem there..
    you have brought out the beauty of anture itself..
    cool, keep it up! see yah...

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