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    help...

    sorry for never being good enough for you....
    sorry for the things you've been through
    and all the things that some with sayiing i love you.
    we all have pain and sorow
    mine is just a curse
    Forever to spend my life
    without any cure.
    So go oon and leave, like the others have
    Don't let this keep you here
    for it only gives back worse
    I know i say i love you
    i really and truely do
    but somtimes i wonder
    it thats enough for you.
    We lay in eacothers arms
    we give eachother such pleasure
    such a difference it seems
    but now i'm lost standing on the inbetweeen
    so do i choose the past
    the one i've always known to be haunted
    or do i choose the future
    the one i've come to never live without

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    Re: help...

    Thats a very nice poem,its a bid sad and has a harsh ending with one of two options to chose from.

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    Re: help...

    ahh jamie dont pick the past plz stay with the new and good plz i beg u im truly tryin too and we will hopefuly find better in the new kk ^^

    and this is quite a good poem plz have more

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    thanks you guys and to tell you the truth i wrote it this morning... And yes equinn i am staying with the future but...

    thanks for the comments^^

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    Re: help...

    i really liked your poem^^i truly felt as though i have a connection with it. i would love to read more good job!=]

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    Re: help...

    It's such a sad poem :/ but it's hard to understand what u are going through... *sighs*
    ^^ i'll be by urside and support u all the time.. ^^ good poem again... i hope u will write more

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    Re: help...

    I know just how it feels for him... I can imagine my ex saying that to me... wait no, he would never say that! He'd keep me with all his strength, lock me in an iron cage and make me sing and bleed for him!!! (quoting my own poem >.< lol) to say: "Let me go..." is to prove you truly love the one you say that to...

    "so do i choose the past
    the one i've always known to be haunted
    or do i choose the future
    the one i've come to never live without"
    ^ This stranza seems just so interesting to me... it's a bit ticky it seems, "the one I've come to never live without"- makes you think if you mean that you can't live without this future or you couldn't create such a future... nice... ^^

    Anyways very nice poem and made me think too... nice work Jamie ^^ I hope everything works out...

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