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    Titled: Her
    By: Piggy!

    The obligatory clock strikes 5:50am,
    and the radio begins to sing,
    the beats and melodies tip-toe tango with the tune,
    a tune I remember her humming just yesterday,

    Rising steam from the warm shower head rejuvinates me,
    breathing life into my lungs and revitalizing my weary muscles,
    reminding me of the placidity and sweetness that flavored her cup of tea,

    Stepping out, chilled air caressed the surface of my face,
    hoping the numbing illusion could substitute the absence of her touch,
    envious of her gentle and delicate fingers,

    My daily conversations has seen no new corners and has made no new turns,
    all that's left is the anticipation of the familiar ringtone,
    hoping and wishing my ears could sit attentively to her narratives,

    Sleep creeps up on me like winter nights now,
    and my fever swells without her refreshing chilled touch,
    I seek but only to see a pillow left vacant,
    finding only that I am madly missing...

    o~Piggy-san~o

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    Re: Her

    wow! normally i am not fond of the free verse much but this one is really good. i could imagine what you were doing and the emotion was jumping out of the poem.
    every rose has a thorn

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    Re: Her

    -claps-

    Bravo, my dear. Bravo! Structure, flow, content, vivd imagery... Beautiful, this is purely beautiful.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: Her

    Very unique! Adding it to my favourites O(^_^)O
    Good work! Everything is perfect! The flow of the poem is.. awesome!!!!

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    Thats an awesome poem, keep on writing!!
    It's really deep and toughtful and dreamy, its kind of like a vivid dream stuck into your mind.

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    awsome poem. it is definitly one of my faves on this site
    I love beautiful carnage.

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    Re: Her

    very awesome trung its been a while since you have
    did anything and this one really expresses your feelings
    and the emotions are really there i loved it alot.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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