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    For Her!




    Everything is silent as he walks
    up to the door , she walks up to
    him with a smile and Say's she has
    missed him all day , as the day goes
    on a brand new trouble rises she Tell's
    him she has regrets and she wants to
    make things right.

    As he sits not sound does he make
    after a few minutes of deadly quiet
    she speaks up again , please you must
    understand i must make things right
    because if you want me 100% then
    i must go to him.

    Another minutes passes as a tear comes
    to his eye , he looks to her with a smile
    and say , do what you think is best , she walks
    away with heavy heart but she must do what
    she thinks is right as the evening comes the anger
    grows and lord knows it ain't right.

    All his life he has held back his pain
    and even swallowed his pride becuase
    she means the world to him and he just
    wants her love . the moon rises as the
    phone is picked up , she said i have to see
    you its something i have to do.

    In the a room near by that smile starts
    to fade , he keeps telling himself she will
    be his some day soon , she walks by him
    with perfume on as a heart begins so crack.

    He just goes to bed with a heavy sigh
    as she stays out the hole night , 6 : 30
    in the morning she comes in to there room
    he hair is brushed back light with a new scent
    from a stranger.

    He hears a voice in the other room
    as she says be quiet , all these years
    of giving in to what they want ,is now
    a raging storm he gets up from where
    he lays and walks up to her with a smile.

    He says i think its time for you to understand
    the me because all i have ever done try to
    be the best i could and you throw it in my face,
    she stands there as the storm grows bigger
    by the minute all she can say is that it was what
    she needed to do to be with him.

    His smile went away as the lightning flashed
    and the storm got worse and she knew she
    passed that final line as he walked towards
    that gun he had in the corner cabinet , and
    his eyes are dead to the world , she screams
    please dont as foot steps come from another room.

    The man walks in and hold her tight and
    says whats going on , a fire rings and the
    man falls dead and he hold that trigger light,
    he says , baby we are through i have had enough
    of this if i cant have you no one can so you will
    get whats coming to you .

    She closes here eyes as she prays to god
    hoping this is just a nightmare , a shot rings out
    she jerks a bit and she hears him the floor she looks
    to him now as the blood flows from those lips he loved
    her with , she picked the gun up with a tear and said
    you want beat me so easily , she pulls the trigger now
    she is dead , but this world just keeps going on.
    _______________________________________________

    this poem/story is about how one man loved a girl
    so much that he did what it took to make her happy
    it sounds stupid for some guy to say *ok if being with
    this other man makes you want me even more then
    you can do that* there have been many guys who
    have said this at one time or another and it stupid.

    in the end everyone will be hurt even if it isbt
    like this poem/story , and im sorry its so long but
    i couldnt find the ending i wanted when i got near
    it , i felt like i had to keep going.

    any comments or sugestions are welcomed
    Last edited by HolderOfTheDarkChalice; Jun 12, 2007 at 05:52 AM. Reason: i messed the tittle up
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: For Her!

    well it certainly is long but it's still great though loved it, even if it was a love story but so what your great post more poems or stories which ever

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    Re: For Her!

    thanks im glad you liked it and i tried stoping
    as sevral difrent point but the story/poem just
    wanted to keep going and i could stop lol , i
    still have problems with comeing up with a good
    ending when that happens.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: For Her!

    well to be honest i'm kinda glad you didn't stop as it might not have been as good then and the ending was great i too find it hard ending stuff like stories and poems depending on what it's about that is

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    Re: For Her!

    This was a very good story. It had romance,suspense,and murder all rolled into one. It's so unbelieveable of how two people can love eachother so much they go to extreme lenghts to be together. Great job.
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    Re: For Her!

    What a nice poem story ...i love it ...
    very nice...and it's not that talll and not short ..but very goood work ...
    how do you discrayab your idea ...nice way to writed like a story ....hope to see more...

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    Re: For Her!

    I liked it quite well... it was interesting to read it.

    A great story you've told here, though I just don't understand how something like this could happen in life- first time I hear somewhere that a girl says to her man that she needs to be with someone else to love him more... that sounds like total bulsh*t to me... lol But I guess things like this happen in life so thank you for bringing my attention to it ^^

    Indeed a nice work again Chris ^^

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    Re: For Her!

    by that i mwan she regrets not having been
    with some other guy and she feels she cant really
    love the man she is with untill she has been with the other
    guy , what makes this a fictional story is that he let her
    and didnt leave , anyother guy would have left.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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