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![]() Credits: 12,324 | Her Dream She watches him closely in the rays of the sun Always waiting for some sign that he really is the one And in the midst of all his pain and suffering She realizes that he is the one Not because of some mistaken or unrealized sweetness But because of the simple fact that he loves her For who she is and not the false front That she always puts up for everyone to see Looking back on those beautiful, sweet and romantic memories She goes to that far away dream land where she is his once again Holding him in her arms as he places on of those sweet kisses Upon her lips that make her knees go weak and long for his touch He brought the light to her life so long ago And as she moves on to a new life, yet unknown She can’t help looking back and wondering what happened To the love that they once had felt When she was with him she mever wanted to let him go She wanted to hold him forever as her own But in the end all they ever did was fight So she had to let him go, knowing the pain that comes with it If I could go back and warn her I’d tell her to go through it just the way she did Because to this day she still looks back and thinks of those As her happiest moments for the simple fact that they were spent with him As she looks in the mirror she sees me staring back at her With one hand holding a knife and the other hand bleeding Closing her eyes one last time She drifts to that world where she can be his for all of time
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![]() ![]() Credits: 14,832 | Re: Her Dream Sounds veeeery similar ^_^ It's a very nice, warm and fluent poem. But that is an understatement. It starts suddenly, creating a peaceful image in my head, of a gentle and loving girl who once loved her man. It did create a lot of emotion too, in my opinion. I loved its flow, how it smoothly steps to another level without loosing its essence. Great work.
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![]() Credits: 12,324 | Re: Her Dream Quote:
Thank you but it's not really all that great. I was intented to create a girl who loves a man that no matter how hard she tries she cant give him up and in the she dies with him as the last thing on her mind and drifting into an eternal sleep where she can always have him by her side. I created it out of 3 peoples lives. Mine, Mary's(a friend of mine) and My ex boyfriend(you).
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![]() ![]() Credits: 14,832 | Re: Her Dream Eh, you never know. It can be a year before all of this comes true. Anywho, I love the last part.
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![]() Credits: 77,334 | Re: Her Dream Quote:
![]() i thought it was OK. not really one for poems, tho. i prefer haiku, if anything.
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![]() Credits: 12,324 | Re: Her Dream Quote:
aww.. I'll try to make a haiku for you sometime Ochi. ^^
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![]() Credits: 13,442 | Re: Her Dream I love this poem.....one mistake mever....I think you meant never.....but keep on writting yet another poem of yours that almost made me cry....I was wonder what happen because when I read this poem I feel your pain...did somebody hurt you???
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![]() Credits: 12,324 | Re: Her Dream Actually yes, He hurt me but I hurt him... so we both share this kind of pain...
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