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    Her new high

    She doesn't love you the way she loves me.
    I'm her new high, so keep your damn weed.
    She's on vacation, yet she's calling me!
    No phone love for you, just S-P-R-O-U-T.

    Unlike you, I'm certain I'll do less to hurt her.
    I'm 'bout as certain as a fat broad wanting a burger.
    You'll be salty like a man who was set up for murder
    when I take her back from you--call me the heart-burglar.

    Like a hot fillet-o-fish with some cold ass fries,
    Nobody want's to touch you, you're just here for the ride.
    Who ordered loser boyfriend with Sprout on the side?
    Dude, she knows that you'll slip up royally, in due time.

    You're just one mistake away from losing this match!
    And I'm just one step closer to winning her back!!
    It's clear as day that she's gettin' tired of your crap,
    yet you can't see it; someone should give you a big slap!

    She doesn't love you the way she loves me.
    I'm her new high, so keep your damn weed.
    She'll never see you the way she sees me,
    so go back to Monticello and just leave us be!!
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    Re: Her new high

    lol hell no you definetely reached a new high with this one sprout i like it but come on man sprout on the side shit its the entree you have to worry bout but i guess in this case the entree is pretty much burnt at this point service has been crappy!!

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    Re: Her new high

    Dude sprout this one has your humor back in it. however you are getting better, kind of doing what I do, putting your emotional "chi" into your writing? lol keep it up and let the feelings out.
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    Re: Her new high

    WOW , some deep words there!! just one thing who is that intended on!!??

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    Re: Her new high

    Quote Originally Posted by Alondra View Post
    lol hell no you definetely reached a new high with this one sprout i like it but come on man sprout on the side shit its the entree you have to worry bout but i guess in this case the entree is pretty much burnt at this point service has been crappy!!
    LOL, the entree's burnt, the service sucks and the "employee" is unreliable. That makes for one f***ed up resturaunt. You really think I hit a new high, eh? Funny, that's the name of the poem. ^_^

    Quote Originally Posted by Ichigo_06 View Post
    Dude sprout this one has your humor back in it. however you are getting better, kind of doing what I do, putting your emotional "chi" into your writing? lol keep it up and let the feelings out.
    Yeah, I've been workin' hard on keepin' the humor in my work. Lately, it's all been uber dark. It's good to see that you and Lasura prefer the funnier stuff. And, I've been inspired to put that emotional "chi"--as you called it--in to my work. The last few poems I wrote seemed kinda dull up until this one.

    Quote Originally Posted by SnoReaper View Post
    WOW , some deep words there!! just one thing who is that intended on!!??

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    Very deep words indeed. This is about someone who's pretty much "pissed in my backyard," so-to-speak. I hate him with all my guts and I'm pretty sure he knows it. Long story short, he's the backstabbing "best friend" you'd never want in your life.

    Anywho, thanks to all three of you for your comments and taking time to read this! ^_^ I'm glad to see that you all liked it! Arigoatou!


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    Re: Her new high

    I really like the way you wrote this. Though the subject matter makes me squirmy. It's well written and the flow is lovely. I like the humor mingling with your anger. It makes for an interesting mix. I wish you'd write more....not depressed stuff.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Her new high

    This one was very amusing. I like how you wrote it, though for me... the flow seemed a bit long in parts of it. It just may be that I'm comparing to my style, as mine usually follows a flow like a river, but that's just me. Anyway, I'll be sure to read some more of your stuff sprout. Later

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    Re: Her new high

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    I really like the way you wrote this. Though the subject matter makes me squirmy. It's well written and the flow is lovely. I like the humor mingling with your anger. It makes for an interesting mix. I wish you'd write more....not depressed stuff.
    I guess I can understand why it makes ya kinda squirmy. I'm glad you like it at the least. I've been doin' more humorous stuff lately. I dunno how it started again, but I'm glad I can still do it. ^_^
    Quote Originally Posted by Shade/K' Heart View Post
    This one was very amusing. I like how you wrote it, though for me... the flow seemed a bit long in parts of it. It just may be that I'm comparing to my style, as mine usually follows a flow like a river, but that's just me. Anyway, I'll be sure to read some more of your stuff sprout. Later
    Well, we all can't be "perfect". But I'm glad you took the time to read it. ^_^ I did the best I could to keep the longer parts from bein' too long. I guess I had too much to say with what little time I had to work on this (When I'm at work, I gotta be sneaky here on AO). I'm glad you were amused by this one. I was too, LOL.

    Thanks to both of you for your time and input! ^_^


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