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    Hide and Seek

    Hide and Seek

    A bounce
    A leap
    Was in its step
    As though it were happy about the death
    One swoop
    No pain
    It was all just a game
    To the creature that had two faces to blame

    A face you say?
    No, rather...
    A mask for play

    It would come at night
    To give you a fright
    And a taste of what's to come
    But when it was done
    It would be gone
    As though it was only a ghost

    The children made fun
    As they played in the sun
    Not expecting the creature to show
    They waited 'till dark
    In the local park
    And were never heard from again
    One is to say
    That is was the creature's play
    A game of Hide and Seek

    To this day I wonder whom
    The creature of two faces was?
    An angel of light
    Or rather a demon of the night
    All that I can tell you is that it wants to play
    A game of Hide and Seek
    You're it...

    by Majime(rae)


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    Re: Hide and Seek

    Oh wow!! I love this poem! I love scary stuff and this was excellent! Hope to see more!



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    Re: Hide and Seek

    Thank you so much for the generous comment. I'll be sure to post some more later.! ^-^

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    OOOoooo yay! your poem is very nice! Can't wait to see more!! btw, love your sig pic!



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    haha, this is a cool poem u wrote. =] Its nice =] Can't wait for more.

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    Re: Hide and Seek

    me likie. wow a peom that makes sense. that rhymes that has thought into it and it has stanzas. Finally your good i like the ending. and i don't want to sound uptight or teacherish. but i like that you kept to some of the structure that a poem should have.
    every rose has a thorn

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    >.<...wow...thank you all so much...I am going to post some more...really soon.!

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    Re: Hide and Seek

    I'm always glad to see newbies posting... and if it's a poem, I'm sure he/she will post again... and it makes me sooo happy!!! ^^ And if it's a good poem, like this one... It's just great!!! It just makes my day!!

    This really is a great work Majime, I really enjoyed reading this poem and I'd really wish to see more of your works!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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