Excellent!
As I said above, The poem is absolutely brilliant!
The thing I mostly like about this poem is, is how you wrote the poem!
It's amazing! You're ideas are really different from the rest I have to say
Keep it up ^_^
-Zainab
I'm hiding...
Hiding from myself.
Hiding the truth, hiding my pain.
I take all my problems
and stash them away.
Pretending...
Acting like there's nothing wrong.
Yet stuck with problems all day long.
Wishing...
That I was someone else.
Take your thoughts of me and
just put them on a shelf.
Numbing...
Like a boat-load of novicaine.
Make myself apathetic,
so I don't go insane.
I'm still Hiding...
Hiding from the fear of hurting.
Running away from my problems;
Duck and cover! Something's burning..
Excellent!
As I said above, The poem is absolutely brilliant!
The thing I mostly like about this poem is, is how you wrote the poem!
It's amazing! You're ideas are really different from the rest I have to say
Keep it up ^_^
-Zainab
I know just how you feel. Entirely. . . strange how different our problems are but how we deal with them the same.
You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!
I liked the essence of you poem atomik_sprout. In times, it is an escape mechanism to hide the fears rather than facing it. I liked the way you put the feelings into writing, the emotions are clear. The structure of the poem is interesting, in a way that in short lines, the message is conveyed clearly. I hope to see more of your poems in the future, keep up the good work.
Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^
Agreed with all three of you![]()
A simple poem which is easily understandable... ^^ your style is nice toonicely done there ^^ keep up the good job
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I think that everybody can relate with this poem in one way or another. Great job. It was nice and smooth. Easy to read and to the point. I like it alot. Keep up the good work. Hope to see more from you.
Wow! Thanks to all of you who've commented on this so far! ^_^
I didn't think I'd get such good comments on this one, to be honest with you all. LOL.
I'm glad you all took the time to read this and I'm happy you liked it!
Bratling, I've always thought it as strange, how we deal with entirely different issues the exact same way. LOL
well this poem is understandable like rayme said, and it can relate to others in entirely different ways, so well done.
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