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Hierarchy
Part II
He was a soldier, a warrior at heart,
She, a princess without freedom to start.
Within castle corridors they convened,
Ignorant to how they’d intervene.
A lash, a flicker, a hum and snicker,
Her smile wrought glee and laughter.
Wealth dressed bodice and pale fair skin,
To be her suitor would be gods’ sin.
A slick sly smirk of honest quirk,
His warm glare fashioned by work.
Click clack of boots and armor rattle.
His role was to succumb to endless battle.
The lack of crits & comments tend to really be insulting to me.
I thought it was a well written poem. I like the last line about the endless battle it really fits in good to tie up the poem. Although I haven't read Hierarchy part I and think the second part took some time to right even though it is short. Could tell you spent some creative hours assembling this poem. I'll look for part one to comment on, but keep up the good work regardless.
hey.. thanks for the comment, the first part is later on in the forum, same page right now, it's titled w/o the number.
This is also a good poem. It was just as good as part one was. I look forward to reading part 3.
Dood, many people on this site get no comments or anything but they still post other things they've made. Just chill a little or something.. nice poem though, 'cept for the terrible cliche of the hero and princess, why not a tiger in a bikini and maybe a banana made of gold..? Genius.Quote:
Originally Posted by -=Broken^Halo=-