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    holding back .........

    I’m holding back the tears
    From the heart ace and sorrow
    That you have cosed me
    Thro the years
    Witch I thought was a good thing
    But know I see we both have different ideas about life
    So I’m going to go my way and you can go yours
    And we both shall see were we end up
    And I know one thing
    We both won’t end in
    The same place.
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    Re: holding back .........

    This poem was good. May I ask, how much time you spent on it? Equinn, once you write a poem, please also take time to revise it, just so to make it an easy-read for the readers.

    Small corrections:

    I’m holding back the tears
    From the heart ace and sorrow
    That you have caused me
    Through the years
    Which I thought was a good thing
    But know I see we both have different ideas about life
    So I’m going to go my way and you can go yours
    And we both shall see were we and up
    And I know one thing
    We both won’t end in
    The same place.


    Keep up the good work, and write more! ^_^

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    Re: holding back .........

    thank you sooo much and i didnt spend much time on it thoTT__TT and thanks for the corrections ^_^ i o u ^_^

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