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    Otaku baikuza may be famous one day baikuza may be famous one day baikuza's Avatar
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    hope of phoenix

    When your shoulder is hurt
    When you feel all people around are scratch your heart
    and playing on you
    Just because they only want their home work was done correctly

    When each person around you only want to use of you
    But not to work with you as a team
    When you are sick because you push too much your body to do those job yourself
    When you are exhausted and
    no more energy to run your own business

    They do not care of you
    The only what they see is their own score
    You are nothing for them
    but a snack that had nothing can be eaten
    For them, now, you only a trash

    Yes.
    They are so fulfilled with their ego
    They are too selfish
    When the system force you to be what you feel it is wrong
    When the way for your dream become what you do not want to make any step on it
    When the system will kill your hope if you do not obey it
    When a master teach the class but not see you
    Even you are better to do it than a person who try to do the same as you but do it wrong

    Dear my friend,
    Don't be sad
    Don't be too hasty
    Don't kill your self
    Don't kill them

    I know you heart is hurt scar
    Hurt a very deep scar
    But,

    You must be patient
    You must revive your own life
    And be new born the great phoenix

    I know you can do it my friend
    Because you are better than them, much better
    Because you have a dream
    Because you are still alive and have the time

    You do not need to be like them
    You do not need to obey a foolish law
    Because it is not what you want to

    You can find the way
    to revive and alive your life
    Be patient. You will know what to do
    Even now your life is in difficulties
    The time will come

    Don't be sad, my friend
    I am always be with you

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    Domme Kasai may be famous one day Kasai may be famous one day Kasai's Avatar
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    Hmm. This was an interesting way to approach poetry. Punctuation and work on your sentences would have made it in an enjoyable read.
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    thank you kasai. i'm glad you like it. (^_^)

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    Re: hope of phoenix

    Nice poem baikuza, keep it up man.

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