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    Hopelessness

    As I lay awake in the restless dark,
    I bring to memory the scent of your skin

    Those Soothing kisses,
    Trembling thoughts,
    Heavy eyelids

    Revelations of Endless nights,
    Painfully breaking into the light

    With the taste of your loneliness lingering in my tongue,
    I turn the sweet sinfulness into silent prayer

    Those aching sighs,
    The frenzied heat,
    Your fiery gaze

    Painting my thoughts red,
    Your lips reflect the bad blood throbbing in my ears

    With the taste of your hopelessness lingering in my tongue,
    I turn the sweet sinfulness into silent prayer

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.

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    Re: Hopelessness

    Great writing Seirika =o! I really got touched by it, your word choice is very strong. The title fits your poem perfectly, because that is what I felt when I read it.

    oh P.S.

    I don't know why but when I read this sentence:

    "With the taste of your loneliness lingering in my tongue"

    I kept on reading it wrong XD. Instead of "in my tongue" I kept reading "on my tongue"

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    Re: Hopelessness

    Maybe that was an error on my part D<
    Anyways thank you,I'm glad you likes it ;3

    Become a wind, unfathomable distress. I'll hold back your loneliness.

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