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    How do I Atone?

    How do I Atone?

    Lying in the warm sand of the ocean,
    Tears fell down on the ashen-colored face.
    A whirl of painful memories dominates,
    As the heart is stabbed with regrets.

    How do i atone for the sins i committed?
    Many nights i lie wide awake and wander;
    Sins are like the stars in the night sky,
    Illuminating my painful guilt as time goes by.

    How i really wished that these sins leave me be,
    To cease the hunt for my repressed thoughts!
    I long to live a quiet life,
    Not hell, eternal strife!


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    Re: How do I Atone?

    Ooooh, poems like this send shivers to me. And yet, I can only relate to pieces. See, I wish for solitude as well. And at times I feel Im cursed to live in strife and anguish. Only, I cant figure out why. Im unsure of what sin I may have commited that would make me deserve this. But on the other hand, perhaps its the fact that I dunno what I've done... that makes it sin.

    Anyway, as you may have guessed, this was a thought prevoking work. Keep it up.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: How do I Atone?

    Thanks Peach_follows for your sharing and comments. ^^

    >In times, the one who committed the sin is the only one who can atone for it... In every sin... there is a specific consequence... In every crime that is committed that resulted into sin, has a punishment to face.

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    Re: How do I Atone?

    this poem really hits me its a great piece of work i love it.
    Hope to see more like this in the near future as this is one great poem, so do some more.



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    Re: How do I Atone?

    @aeonking: Thank you for your comment and for liking this poem that i wrote. ^^

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