Thread: How do you...

Originally Posted by kimchi24

How do you surpass,
Which cannot be surpassed,

How do you express,
what you cannot express,

How do you pass,
What can't be passed,

How do you rest,
Without needing rest.

How do u find,
What cannot be found,

How do you kill,
Things that cant be killed,

How do you define,
What cant be defined,

How can u pass a test,
Without being tested.

I ask you again..

How do you surpass,
Which cannot be surpassed,

How do you express,
what you cannot express,

How do you pass,
What can't be passed,

How do you rest,
Without needing rest.

how do you.....
how do you.....

that poem, no offence is rele gay cuz the style is just a repetition, if you changed the syle a little through the poem it would be better if instead of writing 'how do you' and having that as ur title, change it up and have the openin line like it. and matt, u think we can post rap here?"
lol

Originally Posted by Raimann

that poem, no offence is rele gay cuz the style is just a repetition, if you changed the syle a little through the poem it would be better if instead of writing 'how do you' and having that as ur title, change it up and have the openin line like it. and matt, u think we can post rap here?"
lol

yes thank u max
thats was the whole point this is a repetitive style if you dont like it the i dont care.

yes i do think u can but its a waste

Originally Posted by kimchi24

yes thank u max
thats was the whole point this is a repetitive style if you dont like it the i dont care.

yes i do think u can but its a waste

ok but atleast make the ideas broaden , cuz the how do you ideas are the same, maybe like put some funny ones, like

How do you spin da ish
when the ish is to heavy?

that'll make the poem vary more!

Man I like this poem! Its really good! Especially the style of it. Keep up the good work!!

Ah the repititions...that's quite different from some of the others that i have read.I like the fact that you question the readers how you can overcome the difficulties in life.That's what i have to say about it.

I like the style of this poem as well! Asking the reader is a an awesome way to keep the reader entertained! Keep up the good work and I hope I get to see more of you work!

I suggest that you don't repeat over the things you said, other than that this poem is good keep it up