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    Unhappy how heart brake feelz

    I try so hard to please you,
    But everything I do
    Just makes a bigger mess of things,
    And sometimes I hurt you.

    I want to do my best with you.
    Instead I do my worst.
    The things I shouldn't bother with
    I manage to put first.

    I guess that I just care too much, Whenever you are near.
    Although you're always gentle
    So there's nothing there to fear,

    But since you mean so much to me
    I guess I'll always try,
    But botch up everything instead
    Until the day I die.

    this is how heart brake makes me feel

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    Re: how heart brake feelz

    The z at the end of "feelz"... almost prevented me from wanting to read this.
    Im glad I decided to go with my instinct and read it anyway.

    This was really good. Not at all what I expected.... Most the time you see a poem about heart break... and its all about someone being a victim of sorts. But here, you've twisted your response to heart break. To where YOU become the one to cause pain. Interesting.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: how heart brake feelz

    Despair without a doubt no hair,
    a stumbling vomit indeed here shared,
    Contemplation led this Macgyver nowhere,
    Left only with a pale blank stare,

    o~Piggy-san~o

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