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    how it hurts to see u go

    well this poem i made for some one and yeah i hoep u like it and yeah ^_^.

    how it hurts to see you go,
    the pain is unverable and it
    brakes my heart,
    the tears dont stop,
    how many moons until
    i see u again, how many
    seconds, minutes how many
    days, how i want to see you,
    to hear you, to feel you presence,
    i cant stop you nor i will try, i cant
    give you anything, only what i feel,
    you are free and u make your own
    road, and i alone wait,
    who i wish to be able to move time
    until i am with you, and to stop it
    when i have you,
    how i wish that my road
    walks with yours,
    how it hurts to see you go,
    but dont you forget about me
    even i am just a fragment of your
    memory....
    death is not a final goodbey...but...a see you later.
    by me ^_^.



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    Re: how it hurts to see u go

    Punctuation, Capitalization, and spelling needs to be worked on. ^^
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    Re: how it hurts to see u go

    It was a nice poem, but you forgot to use capitalization, punctuation and spelling.

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