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    How you taste!

    As i touch your sides they
    feel so hot , i sigh out so
    much as my tongue touches
    you loving how you taste in my
    mouth.

    You drip so willingly that your
    hotness just flows and gathers
    in my mouth as i swallow you,
    god how i love the thickness
    of your undeniable layer of creaminess.

    Hours pass as i take my time
    enjoying every thing you give
    me so willingly , you make me
    feel so guilty with how you
    just slide so easily on my tongue.


    Finally i nibble you as i swallow your
    cheesiness as engulf you and ravage
    your squareness on that slice of toast,
    as you feel me up i lay there with a smile
    on my face because i know cheese rules.
    .................................................. ....

    This poem is for all the cheese lovers
    out there im sure that this poem
    will make you love cheese even more now
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: How you taste!

    Wow...that wasn't what I was expecting

    I thought I could write a poem about anything until I read this. I don't think I could do it with a straight face...did you? lol. Anyway very nice poem indeed...I loved the words you used 10/10 in my book haha.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Re: How you taste!

    lol I'm glad you liked it and i can write about anything
    pretty much you should see a poem a did about a remote
    control but then again you would see the remote the same way
    anymore lol.

    thanks for your comment and glad you liked it
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: How you taste!

    Hahahahaha wow either that was too provocative or my mind was in the gutter
    lol but good job very interesting lol

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    Re: How you taste!

    thanks lol i thought i would try
    something difrent just to see if
    it went over good , and i think
    i might be the first to try one on
    food but i could be wrong but im glad you
    liked it.

    and the title does sort of pull you in lol
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: How you taste!

    yeah it was fun I did like it but I'm willing to bet it's gonna start a trend O.o lol

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    Re: How you taste!

    lol yeah and you can thank me for that lol
    because i could post lots more on this subject
    its almost puches the envelope but it dosnt
    reallt it just seems like it lol
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: How you taste!

    The words could have been more thought out, meaning:

    hot (an expression that I feel could be changed with another one...though it is somewhat the term which leads others to think that this is not for children to read)
    hotness (it can do, but the term is soooo simple and not quite rich...)
    creaminess (the word seems not quite fitting, in the way the line flows)
    as engulf you (as I engulf you)
    feel me up (fill me up?)


    Those parts could have been further worked upon.

    But all in all, the meaning came through, and for a moment there, I thought you were going too far in describing feelings explicitly. The ending breaks away this feeling so you better hope everyone reads till the end or some might complain.
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