Thread: How you taste!

Wow...that wasn't what I was expecting

I thought I could write a poem about anything until I read this. I don't think I could do it with a straight face...did you? lol. Anyway very nice poem indeed...I loved the words you used 10/10 in my book haha.

lol I'm glad you liked it and i can write about anything
pretty much you should see a poem a did about a remote
control but then again you would see the remote the same way
anymore lol.

thanks for your comment and glad you liked it

Hahahahaha wow either that was too provocative or my mind was in the gutter
lol but good job very interesting lol

thanks lol i thought i would try
something difrent just to see if
it went over good , and i think
i might be the first to try one on
food but i could be wrong but im glad you
liked it.

and the title does sort of pull you in lol

yeah it was fun I did like it but I'm willing to bet it's gonna start a trend O.o lol

lol yeah and you can thank me for that lol
because i could post lots more on this subject
its almost puches the envelope but it dosnt
reallt it just seems like it lol

The words could have been more thought out, meaning:

hot (an expression that I feel could be changed with another one...though it is somewhat the term which leads others to think that this is not for children to read)
hotness (it can do, but the term is soooo simple and not quite rich...)
creaminess (the word seems not quite fitting, in the way the line flows)
as engulf you (as I engulf you)
feel me up (fill me up?)


Those parts could have been further worked upon.

But all in all, the meaning came through, and for a moment there, I thought you were going too far in describing feelings explicitly. The ending breaks away this feeling so you better hope everyone reads till the end or some might complain.