Hunger pains

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Dec 26, 2007, 08:12 PM
atomik_sprout

Hunger pains

There's a hunger in my stomach,
I gotta rumble in my belly.
So, I try to make a sandwich,
but it seems we're out of jelly.

I wander 'round the kitchen,
tryin' to think of what to eat,
when I see last nights porkchops
but, I don't eat too much meat.

Maybe a bowl of Lucky Charms
then I'll smoke a cig and chill...
But when I open up the fridge
I find it's hosting sour milk!

I've almost ran out of options,
what will fill this gaping hole?
I see a pack of ramen sitting
right next to a bowl...

Open it and nuke it--quick!
I'm too hungry to wait!
Grab my chopsticks, slurp
them up... I'm so glad that I ate!

^_^

**Note, none of this ever happened... I'm just that hungry right now. LOL. I'm off to go eat and watch Haruhi. ^_^**
Dec 26, 2007, 08:15 PM
bratling

Re: Hunger pains

I really liked this. It made me giggle. The last part didn't flow as well as the rest however. But it was good.
Dec 27, 2007, 09:14 AM
atomik_sprout

Re: Hunger pains

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Originally Posted by bratling

I really liked this. It made me giggle. The last part didn't flow as well as the rest however. But it was good.

Yeah... The last part is where writer's block kicked in. That's all that I could come up with, unfortunately. I almost didn't post this poem because of that part actually. :laugh:
Dec 27, 2007, 09:48 AM
bratling

Re: Hunger pains

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Originally Posted by atomik_sprout

Yeah... The last part is where writer's block kicked in. That's all that I could come up with, unfortunately. I almost didn't post this poem because of that part actually. :laugh:

Well despite the forced ending it was really good. I liked the sour milk part. A lot actually. It reminded me of xerxies for some reason. Cus when I thought about it I said "Ain't no way Lori has sour ass milk in her fridge, it'd NEVER last that long!" and we didn't buy milk like ever, on zane.
Dec 27, 2007, 01:40 PM
The GunGrave of Trigun

Re: Hunger pains

Well thats a peom that i really liked keep on writing k i well be waiting to hear more from you .
Dec 27, 2007, 09:18 PM
animechick

Re: Hunger pains

wel this made my night!!
very cute and creative wording. very nice!! and now youve made me hungry also.
Dec 28, 2007, 01:07 PM
atomik_sprout

Re: Hunger pains

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Originally Posted by animechick

wel this made my night!!
very cute and creative wording. very nice!! and now youve made me hungry also.

I'm glad to see I've made someone's night. :D:

Hungry, eh? Good! I've completed my mission of passing the hunger around, LOL. :laugh:

Yeah, I was friggin' STARVING when I wrote this, so it's actually rather good to see that I made others hungry.