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    Hunger pains

    There's a hunger in my stomach,
    I gotta rumble in my belly.
    So, I try to make a sandwich,
    but it seems we're out of jelly.

    I wander 'round the kitchen,
    tryin' to think of what to eat,
    when I see last nights porkchops
    but, I don't eat too much meat.

    Maybe a bowl of Lucky Charms
    then I'll smoke a cig and chill...
    But when I open up the fridge
    I find it's hosting sour milk!

    I've almost ran out of options,
    what will fill this gaping hole?
    I see a pack of ramen sitting
    right next to a bowl...

    Open it and nuke it--quick!
    I'm too hungry to wait!
    Grab my chopsticks, slurp
    them up... I'm so glad that I ate!

    ^_^


    **Note, none of this ever happened... I'm just that hungry right now. LOL. I'm off to go eat and watch Haruhi. ^_^**


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    Re: Hunger pains

    I really liked this. It made me giggle. The last part didn't flow as well as the rest however. But it was good.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Hunger pains

    Quote Originally Posted by bratling View Post
    I really liked this. It made me giggle. The last part didn't flow as well as the rest however. But it was good.
    Yeah... The last part is where writer's block kicked in. That's all that I could come up with, unfortunately. I almost didn't post this poem because of that part actually.


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    Quote Originally Posted by atomik_sprout View Post
    Yeah... The last part is where writer's block kicked in. That's all that I could come up with, unfortunately. I almost didn't post this poem because of that part actually.
    Well despite the forced ending it was really good. I liked the sour milk part. A lot actually. It reminded me of xerxies for some reason. Cus when I thought about it I said "Ain't no way Lori has sour ass milk in her fridge, it'd NEVER last that long!" and we didn't buy milk like ever, on zane.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Hunger pains

    Well thats a peom that i really liked keep on writing k i well be waiting to hear more from you .

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    Re: Hunger pains

    wel this made my night!!
    very cute and creative wording. very nice!! and now youve made me hungry also.
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    Re: Hunger pains

    Quote Originally Posted by animechick View Post
    wel this made my night!!
    very cute and creative wording. very nice!! and now youve made me hungry also.
    I'm glad to see I've made someone's night.

    Hungry, eh? Good! I've completed my mission of passing the hunger around, LOL.

    Yeah, I was friggin' STARVING when I wrote this, so it's actually rather good to see that I made others hungry.


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