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Reply With Quoteits beatiful i love it ..............
me thinking you cared and loved me
hoping you would not leave,
me dreading the day that you would decieve me.
wishing the days could go by faster
after all the love we shared and laughter.
you up leave me and say you cared.
when you know good and damn well
there was someone else there.
i wish i could
turn back time, and speak whats on my mind,
but it's too late now you left me here. going back to your ex girl
who loves you dear. hoping a day will come
that i will see you again,
until then my happy days are disapearing again.
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since my cousin didnt write anymore stories she said i could post one of her poems.
not my work!!NOT MY WORK!!
Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen
its beatiful i love it ..............
HolderOfTheDarkChalice's LiL sis
Are those her exact words? Because some of it seems rather muddled up; "after all the love we shared and laughter."
Shouldn't it be; after all the love and laughter we shared. ?
Honestly, the poem doesn't exactly come through very clear, and some of the lines don't flow well together; "wishing the days could go by faster
after all the love we shared and laughter." It just sorta skips from one thing to another, no real connection between the two. Which would be ok if they had been in seperate stanzas, but they ain't.
The meaning behind the poem is very touching, but she should have read through her work several times correcting things and making sure it read through well.
And it's deceive, but that's probably just a typo ^^;
i agree that this poem needs some work to fix it up, but it is a very good meaning and after a few tweaks it will be a very good poem
You laugh at me because I'm different. I laugh at you because your all the same.
Thanks Hieislove for the siggy!
i will make sure to tell my cuz jessica if i see her.
Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen
what a lovely poem princesslady, keep it up.
lovely poem Princess that my fav!!!!
thank u SasuraiHell
go -=NOOBZ=- clan!
thanks but i didnt write it. i write differrent kinds of poems.
Born to rule, raised to lead, taught to establish: The African Queen
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