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    hurt,more than 1


    As I stand here on the edge.

    With the wind saying your name.

    I clear my head of all...

    Thoughts.


    But one thought stays… and says

    You know you love him ...you have got to let him know that


    But how?...


    He knows my feelings towards him.

    And from the way the acts and talks around me i know he feels the same.

    But he’s afraid to be hurt again.

    As so am I.

    We had been hurt times before.

    I hurt another as well as me witch I’m guilty about.

    I should have told him at the start.

    I should have said I’m in love with someone else I’m sorry

    In stead of yeah sure ill go out with you.

    I was so stupid.

    I hurt a good friend of mine.

    My heart told me I wasn’t in love with him.

    It was attracted to another.

    I should have listened.

    I should of listened to my heart and mind..

    When they warned me.

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    Re: hurt,more than 1

    Nice poem. Hope to see more in the future. It rules!
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    Re: hurt,more than 1

    Neh. Not bad but not awesome. There's something missing, dunno what but something. Putting your lines all over the place isn't working here, unless it's a picture poem, but it's not.

    Good theme I suppose, you just have to find the right words for it.
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: hurt,more than 1

    I thought it was pretty good. I know how it feels to have thoughts of someone you love. But anyways, good work!

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    Re: hurt,more than 1

    oh that is good. man ive had these thoughts before. i cant get over my last relationship it still hurts a little i dotn think the guy even cared. im not the only one, phew its jsut a normal human thing
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    Re: hurt,more than 1

    Not bad, needs some working on the grammar and needs some work, otherwise I li- love the last lines ^_^.

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