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    " I Am "

    I am the sun scarred in the dark
    I am mutiny and distrust
    I am the powerful greed and sorrowful hatred
    I am the ever lasting putrid lust

    I am the wind that makes you turn
    Away from the life to which you were born,
    I am the pride you seek to retain
    The rain of standing which you struggle to keep unstrained,
    The quilt of fake colors that you wish to keep un-torn

    I am the form of your light
    The void of your core
    The loss of heart and joyous wings
    I am the fall which you can never absorb

    I am the pain and shock,
    The doors clearly open
    The ones you always vote to knock

    I am the hatred and the seething
    The burning red flag of deceiving
    The jerk of all trades
    The head of life's parade

    I am the colorful numbness
    The beautiful vixen
    The handsome stud
    The lost commitment
    And the drunken faith

    Though everything as it seems to be
    Seeming not to be what we truly see
    Positively we continue scathing, scratching
    And in our own blood bathing, attempt the unmasking

    Yet the answer to who I am is clear
    In a sense it can be considered a bleak insanity
    The truth still remains at the end of the road
    I am the darkness of humanity

    "Walk in with Reason, and leave with Passion."

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    Re: " I Am "

    a bit depressing but still half true we are a flawed race but that is the reason we have to fix our selfs if we don't strive to do our best we are exactly what you say we are two thumbs up for your truth

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    Re: " I Am "

    WoW!!!!!!!!!!!! Great work!!!!!!!!! This is really, really good... You're very good when it somes to darks stuff ^^ This is really quite perfect... I enjoyed it very, very much!!!!!! It's great!!!!!! I don't even quite know what to say...
    Well but obviously I have to say something not to make a low quality post... Well the stranza before the last stranza was quite hard for me to understand... but that's the curse I must carry for being born in Latvia *giggles*

    Nice work! I hope to see more! Cheers!!!

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: " I Am "

    Quote Originally Posted by Lasura View Post
    WoW!!!!!!!!!!!! Great work!!!!!!!!! This is really, really good... You're very good when it somes to darks stuff ^^ This is really quite perfect... I enjoyed it very, very much!!!!!! It's great!!!!!! I don't even quite know what to say...
    Well but obviously I have to say something not to make a low quality post... Well the stranza before the last stranza was quite hard for me to understand... but that's the curse I must carry for being born in Latvia *giggles*

    Nice work! I hope to see more! Cheers!!!
    Though everything as it seems to be
    Seeming not to be what we truly see
    Positively we continue scathing, scratching
    And in our own blood bathing, attempt the unmasking
    Basically the first two lines refer to the fact that when things seem to be something, they can seem to be something else as well. And there are times when it seems to be something, but then it's completely the wrong way. Things aren't what we see them as, in the eyes of one another. They can be different and that can create disagreements and hostility.

    This leads onto the next lines, where we are digging and digging to find one true meaning to something, yet along the way we find ourselves attacking one another about it, or about things in life in general, all in the name of looking for the right reality we perceive. This explains how pointless our actions as such are, because when we can't accept things we wish to be rid of them, and in the end trying to kill it. And as we all know it only harms yourself just as much as when you harm another. It marks you as 'immoral' or 'a trouble maker'. And the list could go on.

    But that can be interpreted in many ways, that's just one kah-boo-tal in this all.

    So don't blame your origin about not understanding. It just takes time to open your mind is all.

    Thanks for the comment. ^^

    "Walk in with Reason, and leave with Passion."

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    Re: " I Am "

    lol ^^ I blame my language and vocabulary, don't worry ^^ I actually am proud to be a Latvian... Well thank you for explaining that to me ^^ and you are very welcomed for the comment, I am thankful for sharing this poem with us ^^ Yea and I hope to see more ^^ and have a nice day!

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    Re: " I Am "

    wow that was really good. I really like it.
    I have to say the one thing i noticed was your choice of words.
    Each one it seemed to be placed perfectly.
    I love it!!
    Keep it up.
    And love the big range of vocab.lol.
    *sigh* ERRR its soo great!!.lol.
    I kept thinking abot this book i read.lol.
    err
    so great. ^_^

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