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    I Am Back Again!

    Its been a while since we have
    talked , no long good buys or
    hellos , non of the dramatic pause
    that come with just walking away.

    Who knew that with every time
    i left it became easier to not care
    about your feeling's , So I'm here now
    back to where i know i belong being so blind.

    Troubles have always been there and i always
    kept them away from you for the fact you might
    not be able to handle what has followed me yet
    again , i stand here sighing as my burden feels
    lifted seeing how receptive you are of me.

    I always travel here and there never staying
    on one trail or road because staying to long
    on one path can get you more lost than a
    path less traveled , i know you don't understand
    what i say but put simply i only want space
    tempered with solitude.
    _______________________________________
    Its a good bye with out words , a feeling of
    being there with out even even being near it at all
    confusion is what this poem is about its something
    different from a point of view that only those who leave
    can understand, though its not right when it happens.

    and with how random i was with the wording or tried
    to be i was trying to make it sound like an explanation
    from some one who was not sure of what to say but wanted
    to be accpted after leaving for so long.

    it has been a while since i have posted becuase of this and that
    so comments and suggestions are still welcomed .
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: I Am Back Again!

    Good poem dude, but the wrong kind of "buy". It would also be better if you use better punctuation. I don't like long good-byes either! Hope to hear more poems from ya and hopefully it doesn't take as long.

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    Re: I Am Back Again!

    Quote Originally Posted by yinyangAio1 View Post
    Good poem dude, but the wrong kind of "buy". It would also be better if you use better punctuation. I don't like long good-byes either! Hope to hear more poems from ya and hopefully it doesn't take as long.
    no offense but i think this is well written except for the typo on the goodbye. the punctuations will also help give the phrase a shorter look (looks neater). but i hope i read more over all the poem is good.
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    Re: I Am Back Again!

    Great poem for it to be the first one you've posted in a while. It puts me in the mind of a guy who loves a girl and really wants to be with her,but the open road is calling him to leave her so he can explore the world to see what else is out there. I'm glad you're back.
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