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    I Come To You

    This feeling is something
    I cannot quell
    For your beauty
    Ring a bell

    Your beauty shines
    In your face
    And in your eyes
    Is a look of grace

    Your love is
    A passionate thing
    Attracting many people
    To the love you bring

    Flirting is something
    I do “quite poor”
    But this is something
    Quite a bit more

    For I am one
    Who goes to few
    But with love and passion
    I come to you

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    Re: I Come To You

    This is really unexpected to me and you do a lot of improving now your a genorous perosn that has good poetic skills and I am very appreaciated by you, and also I would like to add that you have created a great poem that when you have problems you can come to whom you really trust please feel free to PM if you have any other problems that I might deal with ok?.

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    Re: I Come To You

    I really like this poem.^_^ It shows passion and I like that in poems. Great work!

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    Re: I Come To You

    I see you improved a lot, which is good! The poem is wonderful, you kept the lines short and you chose the words that went quite well together. Well done!

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    Re: I Come To You

    You've been in proving a lot! I like this poem cause it's so well.... I can't get that word in my head but all I know is that I loved reading it over and over again thats for sure! It's just so good! I hope to see more in the future!
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    Re: I Come To You

    This is really nice. You really poured your soul into it. I feels as if that you could see the person you were speaking of and touching their heart. You truly touched mine. Its good to know that there is still true love in the world we live in.

    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: I Come To You

    wahhooo! I love it..
    Perfect terms, perfect stanza..
    what can i say?
    well done there Jamie..
    (claps)...

    If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
    I don't mind and you don't matter

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    Re: I Come To You

    Thanx you guys....

    although i am happy to reach you in ways that i never thought i could, I am sorry to say that there is no love from which I write my poems... only the thought that i once loved a guy but he was dating someone else... and eventhough he has told me that he loves me and that i am his world, I know that i will never see him for he is half way around the world... That and the fact that once again i feel as though everyone's life would be much better if i was dead....

    but thank you... I'll be sure to write some more for you guys...^^

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