Othello

I died a death but stayed alive
In phantom's likeness I survive
Alive, yet dead, I walk alone
In rooms with walls as cold as stone
I lived a life and dreamed a dream
and loved the life you lived with me.
Then in a whisper of a breath
you left, and then i died a death.
Though dead i live, i cannot part
from love that lives within my heart
within my sorrow i must strive
to keep my hope and faith alive
for all the love that i would give
i surly would prefer to live
to be content, not to survive
but feel my spirit come alive
you slowly took your final breath
'twas me, my dear, who died a death.

<comments please, and any critisizm you may have so i can fix this poem up if necisary>

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Thanks Mischievious Kiss.

Sakurai

Dewd. That was like really good. And it even rymed! Bravo! -Claps- It seems PERFECTO

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Elreka

Hey again Guy!!!!!!!! I am so judging....wow this was good and it rymed. Stupid sakurai!!!!! I am over at her house and she is watching me type this...but that is not the point...great poem guy!!!!!! u should like make a book of poems... my boyfriend rites poems like this... not implying anything...unless...no it can't be!!!!!!! I must kill u!!!!!! what did u do with my boy friend...u stole my boyfriends soul!!!!! lol jk ok? Awsome poem...guy? but i do want my boyfriends soul back...ok? bye!!!!! (I'm going to keep watching 4 ur poems and i wil judge them all i want and there is nothing u can doooooo!!!!!!!!)

Othello

...? Elrika.... you crazy girl lol. j/k. Wanna talk, pm me lol.

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Thanks Mischievious Kiss.

Blade X

this one flows like silk.......when i read it to myself it....i didnt stop abruptly or anything....i think this one is again quite good......the feeling to having ur loved one leave u is painful......this is good....i think this is one of ur best...keep it up

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