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    I Don't Love You

    I don't love you.
    Don't you get it?
    I never did and never will
    You were cold
    And you try to come back to me?
    I don't think so.
    You say sorry and that you love me
    But I don't believe you
    Like they say
    Hurt me once, shame on you
    Hurt me twice, shame on me
    And I won't make that mistake
    So don't ask me
    To come back in your life
    Because you already know that
    I don't love you
    Anymore.

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    Ahh... nice... reminds me of myslef- that's good ^^

    I really like this one, especially I love the last two lines:
    "I don't love you
    Anymore."
    I like it because at first you say you have never loved him, but this "anymore" shows that you have loved him and that makes this poem sad, there's mostly anger in this poem but the last line shows a little bit of sadness witch is something that was missing...

    A great work Akura! ^^

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    the hatred in this poem is awesom
    and life can offer pleanty of heart
    breaks , but its how you handle it
    that makes you either feel used or
    more free.

    very cool poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    wow how hurt and painful that ...that was amazing i love it ...
    I see many hate here and every one in way in this poem ..very good ...
    hope to se more...

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    Thank you all! This one took about 3 hours to think up!lol



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    Re: I Don't Love You

    I loved it!!! It was just great telling that you just don't love that person!!! It's just great!!!!
    「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    i liked it as well, especially the question/answer thing that was going on!

    not very much to critique in this one, good work!

    i also like the one-word ending as well!

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    Re: I Don't Love You

    Hello I totally love your poem it's so incredibly cool!
    Yeah, Bye.

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