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    i dont want to loose you

    Its Hard To Be With Out You, To Be So Far From You, To Know That Il Never Hold You, It Brakes My Heart And My Soul, Its Hard To Hear From You, Yet Not Been Able To Confort You When U Need Someone, Not Being Able To Hold You In My Arms, Its Hard... To See Hear You Criying And Yet Not Been Able To Hold A Single Tear, To See Hear From You Makes Me Live Again Even If Its In Pain, How I Long For You Even If U Are Far Away Yet In My Heart Ur Here So Close To Me, Its Hard To Know That Soon U Might For Get Me, Its Unberable...its Worst Than Death, This Pain Thats Has Been Killing Me, Yet Hearingyou , Seeing You And Felling You Makes My Life Better. How Hard Is To Know That I Might Lose You Some Day, If I Havent Lost You Yet.
    death is not a final goodbey...but...a see you later.
    by me ^_^.



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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    very awesome poem i feel the same way for somone right now
    and the way you discribe the pain when even one second goes by
    is awesome , life is pretty great like this because there is no other emotion
    that can make you go crazy like love can . you did great with this poem
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    Wow. I'm not fond of the paragraph format for this poem. I wouldve liked to see some breaks and stanzas.
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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    oh sorry i just did it in a short time and i just wrote it how i can me to me ^_^! i am glad some of you like it thanks for the comments.
    death is not a final goodbey...but...a see you later.
    by me ^_^.



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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    Beautiful poem... I can relate to it in so many ways... You may have written it in a short time, but I can tell it came from the soul...good job!


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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    Kasai's right,it should have breaks so that the readers will understand it more...anyways,the poem was very sorrowful that i'm feeling sad right now...

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    Re: i dont want to loose you

    oh ok il leave it like this because it was its form so sorry ^_^! umm sorry that its kind of sad.
    death is not a final goodbey...but...a see you later.
    by me ^_^.



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