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    I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    My heart is breaking
    These feelings
    I can't keep them inside

    Each night I pray
    For the strength I need
    The solace I crave
    Peace I've always desired

    All I find is my breaking heart
    While I try to pick up the pieces
    its infuriating...these feelings
    Welling up inside

    They haunt me
    Like a living nightmare
    But I won't hide what I am from you
    You know thats not how I handle things

    So I've decided
    I'm leaving you
    Thats right freeing myself from the chains
    Yes it was something you did
    No forgiveness is not an option

    I've found someone to fill the void
    Some who keeps his promises
    I can feel the love we have
    Even though he's far away

    I know his needs
    That he only looks at me that way
    I don't feel bad about my decision
    Makes me feel light
    Free and so very alive

    So beat it you insolent brat
    You cheating, lying, intolerable pest
    You won't be breaking me ever again
    No way
    Not today not ever again

    Or the one who truly loves me
    Will step in
    And I'll make sure that we break you!

    Our love will go on until the end of time. I will always be yours and you will be mine.

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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    ^^ my my...it started negative then went to positive and ended with anger... sheesh
    nice combination of feelings.. ^^ good job..

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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    Aw shucks. Thanks for the compliment. You wouldn't want a boring poem to read would you? It has to be spicy!

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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    Spicy ? Well if thats what you were going for you sure hit it on the mark very nice poem .It has a nice combination of feelings in and flows nice threw out it IMO great job
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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    wow~! nice poem ^.~
    I could never write something like that ><
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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    Verry nicely done Neves. you did a great job with the mixture of the feelings. it does put a little bit of "spice" in things. verry good keep it up.
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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    Nice indeed... as Ray said- starts negative and sad, goes positive and lovely and ends with anger- it rings back memories somehow.. indeed it does... when you break up at first you feel sad, then you feel... free... and then... angry... luckily peace and happiness comes again after that ^^

    I liked reading this very much... very nice! ^^

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    Re: I WAS the fool... now I've moved on.

    oh my god talk abot a poem mood swing!if i write a poem they have the some mood and never have a mood swing. its a great poem though.
    u never know what you have untill its gone, long gone.

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