I Hate you.

ice viper · Sep 20, 2007, 05:18 AM

I Hate you for makeing me fell stupied all the time.
That is all that you do make fun of people.
All the time day in and day out.
You are nothing more than a human and nothing less.
But for you to think that you are smarter than anyone I know.
I must say that your wrong dead wrong.
I also know that you tried to control me.
But you were having troubble.
I saw it in your eyes everytime I looked at you.
Now I can say I am away from you for making me fell stuped all the time.
But no matter what anyones says about you.
I know I will always hate you.

I've never done something like this before. So what do you all think?

*RayMe* · Sep 20, 2007, 05:24 AM

hmm.. sounds like an angry girl there.. @.@ but a bit well..lets say...not too angry yet.. lol ^^ a mild anger...but obviously it is abt a hated person..

and a bit of spelling error..

Its a good poem ^^ keep up the good work... ok sis?

ice viper · Sep 20, 2007, 05:29 AM

Thanks little bro. I know my spelling suck. I will try to make some more. since this is my first poem that I'v made in my whole life.

*RayMe* · Sep 20, 2007, 05:33 AM

Yup train would help ^^ u need more stronger words...and show more hate in there to make it better... if u make another 1 like this... a secret to a sucessful poem is... to... exagravate it more ^^ ..

xD am i right guys?

tsurara · Sep 20, 2007, 05:46 AM

I hate you too

More anger! Insult my mother! rawwwwr!

ps. spelling "stupid" "stuped" is probably a bad idea...

ihauntforlust · Sep 20, 2007, 11:00 AM

It DOES has a few spelling errors

But in other words it's brilliant...^_^ Doesn't rhyme but I like it

-am waiting for more-
-so don't make me wait-

-Zainab

overload · Sep 20, 2007, 02:24 PM

Well I for one like it, it is angry and gritty to the person the anger is for,
that makes this a nice poem.
Iceviper, train and you will be in the potm comp in no time... ok
btw the spelling is not to bad, even if the words are jumbled but the first letter and last letter are in order. anyone can read it. ok

*divine_punishment* · Sep 20, 2007, 02:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ice viper

I Hate you for makeing me fell stupied all the time.
That is all that you do make fun of people.
All the time day in and day out.
You are nothing more than a human and nothing less.
But for you to think that you are smarter than anyone I know.
I must say that your wrong dead wrong.
I also know that you tried to control me.
But you were having troubble.
I saw it in your eyes everytime I looked at you.
Now I can say I am away from you for making me fell stuped all the time.
But no matter what anyones says about you.
I know I will always hate you.

I've never done something like this before. So what do you all think?

*is scared*

You must really hate someone . . . it isn't me, is it?

ice viper · Sep 21, 2007, 05:58 AM

WOW! I really didn't know so may would respond. Thank you everyone for the thoughtful words of wisdom it helps a lot.

Ichigo_06 · Sep 21, 2007, 08:49 AM

hey Ice well done I can see that you were angry at this person. keep up the good work alright?

xxoxx · Sep 22, 2007, 08:49 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by RayMe

Yup train would help ^^ u need more stronger words...and show more hate in there to make it better... if u make another 1 like this... a secret to a sucessful poem is... to... exagravate it more ^^ ..

xD am i right guys?

Yes Ray ...I am agree with you ...
Well Nice first work ..Awww..*I hate you *
Angery feeling ...You should shoot him..

.
Nice work ..Hope to see more ...

Sep 20, 2007, 05:18 AM	#1 (permalink)
ice viper Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2007 Location: I'm lost Posts: 212 Thanks: 5 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 3,404	I Hate you. I Hate you for makeing me fell stupied all the time. That is all that you do make fun of people. All the time day in and day out. You are nothing more than a human and nothing less. But for you to think that you are smarter than anyone I know. I must say that your wrong dead wrong. I also know that you tried to control me. But you were having troubble. I saw it in your eyes everytime I looked at you. Now I can say I am away from you for making me fell stuped all the time. But no matter what anyones says about you. I know I will always hate you. I've never done something like this before. So what do you all think?
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: I Hate you. hmm.. sounds like an angry girl there.. @.@ but a bit well..lets say...not too angry yet.. lol ^^ a mild anger...but obviously it is abt a hated person.. and a bit of spelling error.. Its a good poem ^^ keep up the good work... ok sis? __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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ice viper Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2007 Location: I'm lost Posts: 212 Thanks: 5 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 3,404	Re: I Hate you. Thanks little bro. I know my spelling suck. I will try to make some more. since this is my first poem that I'v made in my whole life.
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: I Hate you. Yup train would help ^^ u need more stronger words...and show more hate in there to make it better... if u make another 1 like this... a secret to a sucessful poem is... to... exagravate it more ^^ .. xD am i right guys? __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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ihauntforlust Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Sep 2007 Location: In a house. ._. Posts: 224 Thanks: 1 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 6,397	Re: I Hate you. It DOES has a few spelling errors But in other words it's brilliant...^_^ Doesn't rhyme but I like it -am waiting for more- -so don't make me wait- -Zainab __________________ [ײַ] þøק¢σяη├†┤.. ~: 3!
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overload Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Aug 2007 Location: On the farside of the Moon. Posts: 489 Thanks: 8 Thanked 14 Times in 13 Posts Credits: 13,044	Re: I Hate you. Well I for one like it, it is angry and gritty to the person the anger is for, that makes this a nice poem. Iceviper, train and you will be in the potm comp in no time... ok btw the spelling is not to bad, even if the words are jumbled but the first letter and last letter are in order. anyone can read it. ok
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ice viper Diamond in the Rough Join Date: May 2007 Location: I'm lost Posts: 212 Thanks: 5 Thanked 6 Times in 6 Posts Credits: 3,404	Re: I Hate you. WOW! I really didn't know so may would respond. Thank you everyone for the thoughtful words of wisdom it helps a lot.
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