tht's a lot of hate for someone's mom.......oh well i guess the mother-in-laws are always a bitch to handle.......nice one but i would have like u to put it into stanzas
I act like i love you, i act like i care
I act like when im not with you
Im wishign you were there.
I act like i love you and everythings ok,
like it was written in sand and has all washed away.
I act like your great and it couldn't be better,
like a fairy tale and nothings to shetter.
Truely i hate you; Deep down i do.
'Fraid to tell you, how i feel about you.
You lied and decieved me,
Like a f****** B****
It's you mom that i must resist.
I hope you realize what you've done.
You'll come back to me and your the one i'll shun.
I hate you mom;i really do.
I despise you mom;
I F****** hate you.
<to my mom, i was really angry at her when i wrote this>
Last edited by Othello; May 26, 2006 at 10:38 AM.
tht's a lot of hate for someone's mom.......oh well i guess the mother-in-laws are always a bitch to handle.......nice one but i would have like u to put it into stanzas
Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
When I began reading it I thought it was about a friend. It's okay but I would have to agree with Blade, it would be better in stanzas.
Okay ur revised version is much better....it's easy on the readers eyes. It's got room for improvement but so far it's better
Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra
wow that was emo indeed, lol man nice poem, i like how you started saying nice things at first.
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