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    I hate you so...

    I act like i love you, i act like i care
    I act like when im not with you
    Im wishign you were there.

    I act like i love you and everythings ok,
    like it was written in sand and has all washed away.
    I act like your great and it couldn't be better,
    like a fairy tale and nothings to shetter.

    Truely i hate you; Deep down i do.
    'Fraid to tell you, how i feel about you.
    You lied and decieved me,
    Like a f****** B****
    It's you mom that i must resist.

    I hope you realize what you've done.
    You'll come back to me and your the one i'll shun.
    I hate you mom;i really do.
    I despise you mom;
    I F****** hate you.

    <to my mom, i was really angry at her when i wrote this>
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    Re: I hate you so...

    tht's a lot of hate for someone's mom.......oh well i guess the mother-in-laws are always a bitch to handle.......nice one but i would have like u to put it into stanzas

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    Re: I hate you so...

    When I began reading it I thought it was about a friend. It's okay but I would have to agree with Blade, it would be better in stanzas.

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    Okay ur revised version is much better....it's easy on the readers eyes. It's got room for improvement but so far it's better

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    wow that was emo indeed, lol man nice poem, i like how you started saying nice things at first.

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