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    I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    I know you cannot hear me... but can you feel me?
    I need you.
    We may have never even met.
    So please hurry and find me.
    I know you're out there.

    When you see me, please, look past my flaws.
    Because I've been protecting a beautiful soul for you.
    Life has thrown daggers at me.
    But Im still here.
    And I know you're out there.

    I need you to hold me. To touch my face.
    I need you to keep me still from shaking.
    What I wouldn't give for someone to talk to.
    Someone to care, and MEAN it!
    Please. Please be out there.

    I've been a good girl. I know I deserve you.
    I want nothing more than for someone to make an honest woman out of me.
    I can feel it in my soul. I wasn't meant to do this alone.
    Someone will help me turn my fatherless sons, into men.
    I will go looking for you, I know you're out there.

    My family is MISSING something. A someone who will never leave.
    Someone is out there whos strong enough to love us all.
    Someone will want all of our love in return. Someone they can call "daddy".
    Its like me and my children are sort of waiting.
    Waiting because we know you're out there.

    So Im sending out my S.O.S.
    I dont want to waste another drop of my love.
    I've got loyalties that are out of this world.
    I know someone will want me to be loyal to them.
    So I'll hold down the fort 'til you get here.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    your poem is quite nice,
    but a little better and it will be great.
    Well that's just an thought so yeah.
    nice poem and good job with it.

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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    Good poem, It shows your be patient for you're true love, I like love poems.

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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    Quote Originally Posted by AngelFlow View Post
    Good poem, It shows your be patient for you're true love, I like love poems.
    Yeah..... I dunno. I want to believe theres someone out there who thinks Im worthy enough to be loved. Although, admittedly it looks pretty bleak from my current standpoint.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    Very nice poem it's a great message to send out to the one you're so longing to find which is your one true love. I really liked it.
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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    A great poem indeed. Nice use of imagery and theme you chose. It is Entertaining. ^_^

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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    The poem doesnt have a nice flow IMO. It seems jagged and not smooth.
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    Re: I Know you're out there (S.O.S.)

    Its nice, In the poem, the woman is widow? am i right?
    And waiting for another man to fill up the loneliness?
    saving her love and kisses only for that man?..
    Wow.. sounds like the guy who will love the girl is lucky!
    Sweet!

    If you don't like me, it's mind over matter.
    I don't mind and you don't matter

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